Talk:Endometriosis and infertility

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 7 June 2021 and 27 August 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): AXie7, Ahuang01, Aochoaucsf. Peer reviewers: T. Ho SOP'23, Tkmurata.

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Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 30 August 2021 and 21 September 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Brk2468, Amcrosetti. Peer reviewers: Npondy, Henrock-Rony, Christiangarciah.

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comments on changes to dx and classification

Overall, there is a lot more content and the concepts appear to be better elucidated. There are a couple of spots where the jargon is a bit strong for non-medical readers perhaps. Specifically under the diagnosis and classification section when describing symptoms. There are a couple terms that are explained (in parentheses) and others are left in perhaps a mild-jargon state (cyclic pelvic pain, infertility) that may be easy enough to google if the reader wanted. Also, the sentence beginning "One suggested pathophys..." is not as relevant in this section as it would be in the below "Mechanisms" section. The stages are especially helpful, and while they are jargon-y, it seems a necessary place for clear wording that is accurate. Well done. The section on ART is also well-described and turns what could seem complex into a clearer (and somewhat positive) discussion.

Foundations I 2021 Proposed Edits and Work Plan

Duvalyane (talk) 18:02, 13 September 2021 (UTC)Proposed/performed edits:

• Delete duplicated references
• Add new developments in mechanistic pathways leading to endometriosis-associated infertility from more current review articles

Correcting citation duplications
Elaboration on deeply infiltrative endometriosis, staging considerations, and affects on infertility
Elaborating on EFI staging and pregnancy probability
Added symptom presentations and epidemiology of endometriosis presenting with infertility, only.Amcrosetti (talk) 18:06, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Aspect of work plan Space for notes Article chosen Endometriosis & Infertility Why this one? Include WP rating scale? How fit with your interests. Other details as desired Rating: Start Interesting and relevant topic that requires additional info; common disorder You WP editing team (up to 3) Anna, Brandon, Eva Initial Analysis of the article This article expands on a specific part of the main Endometriosis article but is limited to basic information Overall organization, what changes Basic organization is present What will you add? Most topics are already covered or covered in the main Endometriosis article. We may add the following:

Prevention/ screening Signs/symptoms Causes (risk factors, triggers, genetics/genome, virology) -- History, society, culture Special populations (pregnancy) What will you remove?

What will you augment? Treatments: Outcomes / prognosis, lifestyle management

Mechanisms: expand and update based on new citations

Clarify the types of “infertility” - statistics of getting pregnant based on staging of endometriosis What will you decrease coverage of? none Roles in the project. List members and planned roles. Possible roles include: Overseer/amalgamator/reconciler Readability editor Researcher Editor/writer-what sections will each do? Linker, for larger groups consider some one who will check the articles linked to make sure that the linked material is sufficient and accurate Images/graphics Other? ED: mechanism BK: treatments AC: staging

All: review each others’ work

Team coordination plan: Options might include, regular team meetings, sharing calendars, setting up a place to keep your work in order to edit collaboratively (this might be the sandbox, or it might be Box or DropBox or Slack, or other) Slack - initial research by 9/7 for review by 9/10

Communication if section organizations change

Foundations II 2021 Group 4 Proposed Edits

Add lead paragraph summarizing the article
Add causes/pathophysiology/ mechanism, depending on information available
Add Diagnosis section
Update sources with more recent systematic reviews.
Update management options, with treatment as a subsection, if applicable
Improve grammar to be more professional, clear and concise

Foundations II 2021 Peer Review By Group 28

• To reiterate, the main goals for this group was to add a leading paragraph, flesh out the article with new sections including pathophysiology, diagnosis, images, and to add sources, and update older information with general improvement of grammar. Overall, I think this group has indeed accomplished most of the goals for this article. The leading paragraph provides a succinct summary of the article, and the diagnosis and mechanism sections provide more context to the topic and are in general easy to follow and understand as someone in the healthcare/scientific profession. However, I do think in some areas this article may be heavy on scientific jargon, and it may be prudent to include explanations certain terms such as "laparoscopy" and "histology" for example. I do like the use of bullet points for ease of reading, but I do note some inconsistencies with formatting, ie. not starting each one with a capitalized letter, however, this is just a nit-pick. There are many citations and references used for this relatively short article, which is a good thing. Many of the references are dated within the past five years. Overall, great job! T. F. McCart (talk) 21:33, 2 August 2021 (UTC)

• I have also reviewed this article for non-biased and neutral viewpoints. Overall, I think this article does a good job at staying neutral. In sections where they discussed biologic mechanisms may not be fully understood, or where severity of disease may affect people differently, the authors were clear with this. I did not see any judgement towards people with endometriosis or infertile people in the article.T. F. McCart (talk) 21:48, 2 August 2021 (UTC)

• I took some time to review this article regarding endometriosis and infertility; this article does an excellent job with the leading introduction discussion by defining what endometriosis means definition-wise and the percent of the population that’s affected by endometriosis and infertility. The degree of severity of endometriosis as well as pathophysiological mechanism of how that occurs is described in detail as well as treatment & management options for the patient. Summary points in bullet form is much easier to comprehend instead of long paragraphs. There’s a time and place for long paragraphs in professional journal articles when meticulous detail is needed, but for an article, mostly bullet point form is perfect. I do believe this team that wrote this article did a good job with the overall flow of writing the article from the introduction to the detailed references. Good job! Tkmurata (talk) 16:35, 3 August 2021 (UTC)

Part 1: Yes this group improve the article substantially by adding more references which consisted of systematic reviews/review/ meta-analysis from within 5 years that provided insights into the health condition. The layout is a lot easier to follow with the addition of new sections. However, more can be added to each subsection to further described each part more in depth or consider splitting diagnosis and classification. b. Overall, this group improved majority of their main goals. These goals helped structure the article to have a better flow. The only goal that needs to improvement is to include images that portrays to the topic for a visual representation.

Part 2: The edits reflect language that supports diversity/equity and inclusion as everything is gender neutral with no bias.There are some areas that has a lot of scientific terms that can include further explanation for the general public to better understand the content. Overall, great job with the edits and I learned a lot :) Keep it up ! T. Ho SOP'23 (talk) 21:50, 2 August 2021 (UTC)

• The major points within this article are verifiable via the secondary source references shown at the conclusion of this article that discusses endometriosis and infertility. Majority of the references are from peer-reviewed journal articles that come from reputable journals Tkmurata (talk) 17:13, 3 August 2021 (UTC)

Our group has reviewed all the references and that they are now correctly formatted. AXie7 (talk) 20:21, 4 August 2021 (UTC) Ahuang01 (talk) 20:53, 4 August 2021 (UTC)Aochoaucsf (talk) 20:57, 4 August 2021 (UTC)