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Latest comment: 2 years ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:53, 7 March 2022 (UTC)Reply


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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
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I will begin my review of this album today. --K. Peake 08:53, 7 March 2022 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • Change the album to being listed as recorded from 2010 til 2011, as winter is not a month so should not be here
  • Pipe Tarbox Road to Dave Fridmann
  • Use bullet points instead of hlist
  • Remove dream pop because there is no source for that and synth-pop since only some songs are in the genre
  • Keep the singles in the infobox but write out their release dates in the release and promotion section, moving the refs there instead
  • The ref for "Polish Girl" gives a release date of August 3, 2011 instead of August 4
  • The English title should be italicised because this is an album
  • "released on" → "It was released on" as a new sentence to avoid a run-on; the initial release date needs to be written out in the body like any info in the lead does
  • "It was recorded between" → "The recording took place between"
  • "psychedelic pop, shoegaze and" → "psychedelic pop, shoegaze, and" with the wikilink
  • Add the release year of Psychic Chasms in brackets
  • "The record was generally well received by" → "Era Extraña received generally positive reviews from"
  • "with some reviewers calling it more focused, tight and" → "a number of whom called it more focused, tight, and"
  • "Psychic Chasms and some praising" → "Psychic Chasms, while some praised"
  • "that on this album," → "that on the album,"
  • "The album peaked at number 74" → "The former peaked at number 74" to specify what album you mean, also write this out in the body
  • "the band's first release" → "standing as the band's first release"
  • The tour is notable for the lead, so add a final sentence in the second para mentioning it was accompanied by a North American tour and when

Production

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  • Retitle to Background and production
  • "where Palomo was living for" → "when Palomo lived there for"
  • "a Korg MS-20 and a" → "a Korg MS-20, and a"
  • "and the first weeks of production in Helsinki involved" → "with the first weeks of production in Helsinki involving"
  • Add the release year of "The Perfect Kiss"
  • "kind of challenge"." → "kind of challenge."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
  • "He said, "It was an" → "He said that "it was an"
  • "evolved from there"." → "evolved from there"" since this is a full sentence
  • "Unlike the previous album," → "Unlike Neon Indian's debut studio album Psychic Chasms (2009)," with the wikilink
  • "that involved building up" → "via building up"
  • "composing this album," → "composing Era Extraña,"
  • [6] should be at the end of any sentence that uses direct quotations
  • "On Era Extraña," → "For Era Extraña,"
  • "He said, "The more" → "He said that "the more"

Composition

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  • "were used as" → "are used as"
  • "and the record also included the" → "and Era Extraña also includes the"
  • Wikilink Nintendo
  • "describing other tracks" → "while describing other tracks"
  • "lazy summer vibe" → "lazy summer feel" per the source
  • "while it wasn't exactly a breakup album, it did" → "while Era Extraña is not exactly a breakup album, it does"
  • Again, ref(s) should be at the end of any sentences with direct quotations
  • "filtered drums and" → "filtered drums, and" with the pipe
  • Pipe reverb to Reverberation

Songs

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  • ""Heart: Decay" and" → ""Heart: Decay", and"
  • Wikilink Game Boy
  • "with 8-bit particles" → "with the sound of 8-bit particles" per the source, with the pipe
  • "that is present on the album," → "that is explored on Era Extraña,"
  • [17] should be solely at the end of the sentence to avoid overciting
  • Allmusic → AllMusic with the wikilink
  • "of all of the songs on the record," → "of all of its songs," to be less wordy
  • Add the release year of "Reunion"
  • "as both songs depict someone" → "seeing a resemblance to its theme of someone" per the source
  • "and has melodies that" → "while observing melodies that"
  • Identify the Blurt writer
  • Add release year of Super Mario World
  • "the "joyful energy" of" → "the "euphoric energy" of" per the source
  • Add release year of Zonoscope in brackets
  • "while AllMusic noted the song sounded" → "while Phares noted the song sounds"
  • "grunge and garage rock." → "grunge, and garage rock."
  • [15] should either be after the song title or at the end of the sentence
  • Wikilink as timbres
  • "said there was "a haunting vagueness" to the song's slow" → "said there is "a haunting vagueness" to the slow"
  • "sounded like music for" → "sounds like music for"
  • "while Phares said it" → "while Phares stated it"
  • "on this track," → "on the track,"
  • Italicise musicOMH
  • Add release years of "Vienna" and "Out of Touch"
  • Wikilink as New Romanticism instead
  • "described it as" → "described "Halogen (I Could Be a Shadow)" as"
  • "Aizlewood compared the song" → "whereas Aizlewood compared the song"
  • "said the song sounded like music" → "said it sounds like music"
  • [14] should only be invoked once in the sentence
  • [15] should be after the song title instead
  • "It is at this point where, according to" → "At this point, according to Killian Fox"
  • Add the release year of "Someone Great"

Release and promotion

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  • Relevant release dates, like the initial one, need to be mentioned here
  • Pipe vinyl to Phonograph record
  • The 47-minute length is not sourced
  • Remove or replace the blog source per WP:SELFPUB
  • Add US Billboard 200 and other notable charts in this section, as it belongs with release when there's not enough for reception
  • Remove overly obvious wikilinks on Texas and New York City

Critical reception

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  • Retitle to Reception per rankings also being here
  • Add AnyDecentMusic? to the aggregate scores
  • "received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
  • "and an aggregate 7.2 out of ten on the site" → "Based on their assessment of the critical consensus, it was given 7.2 out of 10 on"
  • The year-end lists should be in a separate para at the end of reception because rankings don't belong with reviews
  • "it came in at" → "Era Extraña came in at"
  • "tight and cohesive" → "tight, and cohesive"
  • "while it did not have" → "while it does not have"
  • "it showed that the project" → "the album proved that the project"
  • "Hogwood called it a" → "Hogwood called the album a"
  • "turned the building blocks" → "turns the building blocks"
  • Italicise Consequence of Sound and pipe to Consequence (publication)
  • Put parts of that review into your own words per WP:QUOTEFARM, also any album titles need to be italicised
  • Remove the NME rating from prose since that is in the reviews box
  • "he called it" → "he called Era Extraña"
  • "was not as smooth as Psychic Chasms, but that Palomo's influences were" → "is not as smooth as Psychic Chasms, but that Palomo's influences are"
  • Italicise Tiny Mix Tapes and mention the reviewer by name
  • "calling it an improvement on Psychic Chasms and that it dunks" → "saw the album as an improvement on Psychic Chasms and said it dunks"
  • Wikilink MTV
  • "also called it an improvement" → "also noted an improvement"
  • "In more mixed reviews," → "Some reviews were more mixed."
  • "chintzy in places"." → "chintzy in places."" per MOS:QUOTE
  • "and also criticized it as" → "and also criticizing it as"
  • "did not have the" → "does not have the"
  • "aesthetic that Psychic Chasms had," → "aesthetic as Psychic Chasms,"

Track listing

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Personnel

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  • Good

Charts

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Release history

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References

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  • Copyvio score looks slightly too high at 40.1%; cut down on PopMatters quoting to fix this
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  • Ref 1 is citing the incorrect URL
  • Cite About.com as publisher instead on ref 6 and pipe to Dotdash Meredith
  • Pipe Consequence of Sound to Consequence (publication) on ref 7
  • Cite AllMusic as publisher instead on refs 15 and 50
  • Cite Club Fonograma as publisher instead on ref 17
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 18
  • Pipe The 405 to The 405 (magazine) on ref 21
  • Are you sure ref 27 is not a violation of WP:SELFPUB? If you can justify the source, fix MOS:CAPS issues.
    • I believe the source is valid. The "limited edition package" info is worth of inclusion in the article, and the own creator of the "Pal198X" included with the package is talking about it (without any controversial or non-neutral comments, etc.) so I believe it can be used. Fixed caps issues. Skyshifter talk 03:34, 10 March 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • Remove or replace ref 28 per my earlier comment
  • WP:OVERLINK of Under the Radar on ref 29
  • Cite Metacritic as publisher instead on ref 30
  • Cite AnyDecentMusic? as publisher instead on ref 33
  • Pipe HMV Japan to HMV on ref 38
  • Cite zdigital as publisher instead on ref 46
  • Cite Amazon as publisher instead on all refs and remove the location parameter, instead adding the domain afterwards, i.e .co.uk

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