Talk:Es wartet alles auf dich, BWV 187/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:24, 27 December 2017 (UTC)Reply


I'll check this over soon. JAGUAR 19:24, 27 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • " Es wartet alles auf dich (Everything waits for You), BWV 187" - not sure why this is in bold when the other articles I've reviewed didn't have this in bold. No concern, of course; just nitpicking
  • Ideally the lead should be condensed into two paragraphs instead of one large middle paragraph and two short sentences
It's bold in all articles when I write them because it's a redirect, and known better by English-speaking people than the long German. We have a user who likes to change it to a link. For me, the bolding is more important, and the link can be found in the infobox and a footnote, for those who really don't know what BWV means. --GA
  • " The duration of the cantata has been stated as 25 minutes" - why has been stated? By whom? Perhaps it would sound better just as The duration of the cantata is 25 minutes or even The cantata is around 25 mintues long.
Someone worded it like that, and I keep copying, but like yours better. - "by Dürr", the ref.
  • "edited by Leo Treitler, with a critical report in 1967" - how about edited by Leo Treitler, followed by a critical report in 1967}
like it --GA

@Gerda Arendt: I couldn't find anything major enough to put this review on hold, so I'm going to pass it outright. It is well written, comprehensive and all of the sources check out. I noticed that you also improved some things carried over from the previous review too!   JAGUAR 19:37, 28 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

Thank you! Did you see my growing Christmas greeting, with a link from the lead image on my talk? It's also for you! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 19:48, 28 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
That's lovely! Thanks Gerda. JAGUAR 19:52, 28 December 2017 (UTC)Reply