Talk:Eufriesea surinamensis
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Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
editThis article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Xerylium. Peer reviewers: Marcus.kwon.
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Request
editI'm a student at Washington University in St. Louis and will be creating this article for a class. Please feel free to offer suggestions and edits as this is my first time writing on wikipedia. Xerylium (talk) 12:00, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
Added Seasonality subsection
editHello, I am an undergraduate student at Washington University in St. Louis editing this page for a class assignment. I started a section which I thought was helpful to add, on ‘Seasonality’. I created this as a subsection under ‘Distribution and Habitat’ and did some research, finding a new source and citing it. Having a section on 'Seasonality' could be helpful because it, in the very least, helps give insight on how this bee species is affected by climate and seasonal changes. I was only able to add information about when this bee species is specifically affected by the changing seasons. Specific information on how certain behaviors are affected by environmental variations is still needed. Hope this helps! Marcus.kwon (talk) 18:03, 30 September 2015 (UTC)
Peer Edit
editHi! I am an undergraduate student at Washington University in St. Louis and am editing this page for a class assignment.
I thought this article was very well written, but I do have a few suggestions and edits that may be of help.
For the Taxonomy/Phylogeny section, I took out the last sentence because it didn’t contribute very much to the completeness of the article and I don’t think it added anything to the section.
The Description/Identification section was missing a lot of references and I added those references to the section. I think you have to be very careful of stating a lot of these facts without articles because the reader is unaware of where you got these facts. Also, the sentence structure in this paragraph was very odd because of the sporadic nature of the sentences. As a result, I tried to make the paragraph free-flowing in nature by editing the sentence structure. Also, I believe that when you shorten the name of your species it should be E. surinamensis and not Ef. Surinamensis. Also, I deleted the first sentence of your second paragraph because this section is not about worker bees and queen bees, but how to identify these bees.
The Distribution/Habitat section was relatively well written and the grammar was good. Not many changes were made in this section.
The Nesting section, again, was missing a lot of in-line citations and I had to go back and check whether these facts were indeed in the articles that you found. Please be careful next time of citing all the facts in the article so that readers can know where you got this information!
The Mating Behavior talks about the fragrances that males used; however, I am unsure of whether this is valid because this behavior is used for a broader genus of Eufriesia. As a result, I am not sure whether you can include this information because I don’t see any evidence that your specific specie is using this strategy. I know this because the article regarding my specie had some information that was broader to the genus.
The Kin Selection section was relatively short, but I am not sure how much you could have added.
Again, in the Mimicry and Camoflouge section, you reference the Eufriesia genus which is not specific to your species. As a result, I am not sure if this should be included in your article. I believe further research should be done to validate whether your specific species uses the methods that you wrote about. I deleted the predator section because there wasn’t any information regarding predation. If there is no section on predators, I think readers will be able to assume that there are no predators. All in all, I thought the article was a great read and with some few edits I think it has potential to be a great article!Junsang.cho (talk) 07:48, 1 October 2015 (UTC)
Thanks for the Comments
editTo Marcus.kwon, thanks for adding the seasonality section. I knew it was a seasonal bee, but didn't state it explicitly in the Nesting Cycle section so I made that clearer. It makes the section you added a little redundant though, so I may take it out later, but thank you for pointing out its absence!
To Junsang.cho, thanks for your comments. For the Description/Identification section I took out the references that you put in as they are unnecessary. You can just put the reference at the end, it does not need to go after every sentence. But for the Nesting section, I made sure to add references for every paragraph to clear any confusion. I added back the section on predators, Ef. mexicana, and queen bees/workers. I think it's better that readers know there are no known predators, rather than left to assume. Also, I didn't make the importance of Ef. mexicana clear so I will do that. Lastly, it should be mentioned somewhere that this bee lacks a queen bee or workers, which some readers might not realize. I just put it under a new section of Dominance Hierarchy, but I'm not sure if that's the best place for that information so let me know your thoughts. I also abbreviated Eufriesea to Ef. because that is what most of the literature did and so as not to cause confusion with the Exaerete parasites later on. Thanks for the help! Xerylium (talk) 22:04, 1 October 2015 (UTC)
Peer Review
editHi! I am a student at Washington University in St. Louis. This article is very well written and includes a nice selection of topics. I suggest making sure everything is cited appropriately. Are males and females the same size? I think this would be helpful information to add to the Description and Identification section. The dominance hierarchy and diseases sections are short – you could combine the Diseases section with the Predators section. I added hyperlinks to several topics such as orchid bee, Eurfriesia, thorax, and clypeus. I also italicized the names of a few species names. I think it would be helpful to readers to know the conversation status of this bee given it only lives in a specific part of the world; of course this is only possible if this information is available. Overall, this article was very enjoyable to read!Orchidabar (talk) 03:34, 5 December 2015 (UTC)