Talk:Eva Ngigi–Sarwari

Latest comment: 2 years ago by BrxBrx in topic Press-release ish material


Press-release ish material

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Several sentences read as if they were lifted from a press release or a corporate biography, for instance After her first degree, Eva went straight into banking. She spent five years at Cooperative Bank of Kenya, focusing on improving the bank's customer relationship and experience.[2][3]

She then spent another two years at CfC Stanbic Holdings focusing on transaction products and services sales. She served as the manager for that department at that bank.[2][3].

I'm not sure where these sentences, amongst others, came from - they might need to be reworded, or expunged for clarity and weight. BrxBrx(talk)(please reply with {{SUBST:re|BrxBrx}}) 21:50, 22 October 2021 (UTC)Reply