Talk:Everard Digby/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aiken ♫ 14:15, 26 August 2010 (UTC)

Looking close, just a few points, mostly based on prose, but also with 1b, 2a, 6b.

Lead

• Would "foiled" work better than "failed"?
  • That would imply that the plot was purposely stopped - this isn't certain (although likely, depending on who you think authored the Monteagle letter). Fawkes capture could be viewed by some as an accident.
• The last sentence of the first paragraph seems quite long - could it be split in two?
  • Yep, done.
• Is "hunting party" a quote? Should be cited probably.
  • Its more that his group of men was ostensibly a hunting party, and not a "revolt party". This is explained in the body but I thought in the lead that scare quotes were the simplest way to get the message across.
• Overall: it's essentially four paragraphs, but two are of two sentences or less. Might be better to merge them, so it's two/three paragraphs instead.
  • I've merged the first two, the last line I'd like to keep separate just to hammer home the ugly end he met.
• Why is his place of birth commented out?
  • I'm not completely convinced that its his birthplace, he's often described as "Everard Digby of Stoke Dry, Rutland" but that may be where he lived. I don't think there's a parish register that records his birth. Parrot of Doom 16:17, 26 August 2010 (UTC)

Early life

• "The Digby family may have been founded..." According to whom?
  • Done
• "a young heiress who brought with her..." She brought it where?
  • ...to the marriage. I couldn't think of a better way to express it, any suggestions?
• '"calling eachother 'brother' when we wrote and spoke"' Should 'eachother' be one word, or is that typo? If the former, a [sic] might be good.
  • Added sic
• What's a hidden chapel?
  • Catholicism was illegal, the chapel was a hidden room in the house.
• "and possibly for this reason..." Seems a bit vague
  • Hey, this is 400 years ago :)
• "He was apparently an unforgiving landlord..." According to whom?
  • According to Roy Digby Thomas, however I didn't mention him as it seemed fair comment, with his tenants complaining to the crown about his actions as a landlord.

Trial and execution

• Is there a reference for the poem?
  • Done.

Images

• Not sure how necessary it is to say an image is monochrome.
  • Alt text is one of those things I'm very glad was removed from the FAC criteria. I have no preference, if you want to delete it feel free. :)

General

• Tower or tower? I don't know if tower should be capitalised.
  • Tower = Tower of London. Always capitalised. Parrot of Doom 16:17, 26 August 2010 (UTC)

Placing on hold. Aiken ♫ 15:30, 26 August 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the prompt response. This now meets criteria, well done. Aiken ♫ 16:54, 26 August 2010 (UTC)

Thanks :) Parrot of Doom 17:50, 26 August 2010 (UTC)