Talk:Everett Railroad 11

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Everett Railroad 11 when it served the Narragansett Pier Railroad in 1934

• ... that Everett Railroad 11 was originally built for export to Cuba, but due to economical challenges in that country, it remained in the United States?

• Source: "Preservation - Everett joins the steam ranks". Trains. Vol. 75, no. 11. Kalmbach Media. November 2015. p. 92. Retrieved November 30, 2024.

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Created by Someone who likes train writing (talk) and Trainsandotherthings (talk). Number of QPQs required: 0. Nominator has fewer than 5 past nominations.

Someone who likes train writing (talk) 15:25, 30 November 2024 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook eligibility:

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• Interesting: - I think this article has the potential to yield more-interesting hooks. For example, the fact that the Narragansett Pier Railroad had to purchase a used locomotive in 1930 because of No. 11's maintenance issues, despite No. 11 being brand-new.

QPQ: None required.

Overall: @Someone who likes train writing and Trainsandotherthings: Nice work on this article. The hook is mildly interesting, although I was wondering if you could propose other hooks as well. Otherwise, I did not see any other issues with this nomination. Epicgenius (talk) 23:02, 2 December 2024 (UTC)

Comment In that case, how is this hook?:

• ALT1 ... that from 1926 to 1930, Everett Railroad 11 (pictured) was the only locomotive to be owned by the Narragansett Pier Railroad, which, despite No. 11 being brand new, made maintenance on it so unbearable that the railroad was forced to purchase a second locomotive for assistance?
• Source: Henwood, James N.J. (1969). A Short Haul to the Bay: A History of the Narragansett Pier Railroad. Brattleboro, Vermont: The Stephen Greene Press. pp. 36, 45. ISBN 08289-0101-5.. Someone who likes train writing (talk) 00:16, 3 December 2024 (UTC)
  • I like the idea behind the hook. However, it is far too long, at 267 characters; per WP:DYK200 the absolute maximum length for hooks is 200 characters, so this needs to be significantly shortened. Epicgenius (talk) 00:34, 3 December 2024 (UTC)

Comment Is this better?:

• • • ALT2 ... that for four years, Everett Railroad 11 (pictured) was the only locomotive to be owned by the Narragansett Pier Railroad, but it resulted in insufficient maintenance on No. 11, despite it being relatively new?
    • Source: Henwood, James N.J. (1969). A Short Haul to the Bay: A History of the Narragansett Pier Railroad. Brattleboro, Vermont: The Stephen Greene Press. pp. 36, 45. ISBN 08289-0101-5.. Someone who likes train writing (talk) 01:02, 3 December 2024 (UTC)
      • Unfortunately, that hook now implies that it was the only locomotive to be owned by any railroad. I think it would be better to mention the railroad's name directly. In the meantime, I've reached out to TAOT for hook ideas as well. Epicgenius (talk) 02:52, 3 December 2024 (UTC)

Comment I counted this one. It has less than 200 characters total.:

• • • • ALT3 ... that Everett Railroad 11 (pictured) was once the only locomotive to be owned by the Narragansett Pier Railroad, making maintenance on it deficient, despite No. 11 being relatively new?
      • Source: Henwood, James N.J. (1969). A Short Haul to the Bay: A History of the Narragansett Pier Railroad. Brattleboro, Vermont: The Stephen Greene Press. pp. 36, 45. ISBN 08289-0101-5.. Someone who likes train writing (talk) 17:39, 3 December 2024 (UTC)