Talk:Evgeni Berzin/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Zwerg Nase in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:40, 28 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Going to be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 19:40, 28 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Thank you for picking this up! I have made two small changes, but I think, it should be good now. The infobox might be a little confusing now. But as I state in the article body, he had his contract terminated in 2000, but only officially retired in 2001, that's why the two dates don't quite match. Zwerg Nase (talk) 09:12, 29 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
Good for pointing that out! MWright96 (talk) 11:50, 29 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Early years

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  Done, also added a source and added medals to the infobox
  • "Here, he teamed up with Emanuele Bombini," - There
  Done
  • "but Kuznetsov refused." - any reasons as to why Kuznetsov refused?
  Done

1993: The first season

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  Done

1994: Rise to stardom

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  • "Comments by Dr. Ferrari to the press afterwards," - please avoid using Dr. per MOS:DOC
  Done
  • "the tensions within the team mounted" - increased
  Done
  • "Berzin still demanded higher pay" - the word in bold doesn't look like its needed since they is no mention of any other mention of him demanding higher wages in the article
Actually, there is, at the end of the preceding paragraph.
I need glasses lol. ;) MWright96 (talk) 20:17, 30 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "Nevertheless, he was now viewed as the new big name in international cycling." - viewed by whom?
It was in the source, but I removed it, it's a little iffy.
  • "finishing a disappointing 21st" - the word in bold is unneutral
  Done

1995–1996: Ups and Downs

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  • "thereby securing his second place." - the word in bold is unneeeded
  Done
  • "He eventually retired from the race on stage 10." - Why ws
Quoted the source as best I could.
  • "which included a split from his wife Stella." - he and his wife Stella separating.
  Done
  • "He would however lose significant time the next day," - any reasons why?
I guess he just had what cycling jargon calls a jour sans, but I cannot find a source for that.
  • Val d'Isere is missing the hyphen between "Val" and "d'"
  Done, well spotted!
  • "on his way to eventual overall victory." - en route
  Done

Later career

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  • "Berzin rode well to place second to" - the text in bold is not neutral
  Done
  Done
  Done

Career achievements & Grand Tour general classification results timeline tables

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  • The spaces between the "Source:" and the refs is not needed
  Done

References

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  • The author of Reference 3 should be better off written as Nicholl, Robin for consistency
  Done, also fixed date format
  • Reference 42 is missing the author
  Done, completely overlooked that the author was given below the article
  • Reference 43 is missing the language it was written
  Done, also fixed date format

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 11:50, 29 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Thank you very much for the swift review! I think I've addressed all points. Zwerg Nase (talk) 18:22, 30 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
@MWright96: Thank you! :) Zwerg Nase (talk) 11:35, 31 May 2020 (UTC)Reply