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@George Ho: Actually, a commercial single release does exist under catalog ID# 6086. It seems that its release was quite limited and perhaps only in Japan. In my educated opinion, I don't think it would have charted on New Zealand's main chart had a commercial release not been made. Thanks for your concerns, Carbrera (talk) 03:23, 14 November 2016 (UTC).Reply
If you mean this release, the webpage says that the front cover of the Japanese release uses "Sunday Morning", which is the second track of the release. In other words, "Excuse Me Mr." was never marketed as the main single. By the way, why removing the caption? The image says "Promotional use only. Not for sale." George Ho (talk) 04:42, 14 November 2016 (UTC)Reply
Identify them as "American rock band" in the lead's first sentence
I think it would be incorrect to label the band as "rock" as there is much discussion regarding why type of band No Doubt is. Others have called No Doubt a "ska band" and an "alternative" one. Because of this, I think just to leave it as is would be best.
"It was written by" → "The song was written by"
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"and produced by" → "while produced by"
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"The song was released as the fourth single from Tragic Kingdom" → "It was released on CD as the fourth single from the album"
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"on August 21, 1996" → "on 21 August 1996"
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""Excuse Me Mr." has also been included on their" → "The song has also been included on the band's"
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"Musically, "Excuse Me Mr." is a rock-influenced ska song" → "Musically, the former is a rock-influenced ska track" as rock wikilink should be in the first sentence instead
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"also created but never released" → "also created, but never released"
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"was selected as one of the best tracks on Tragic Kingdom, with critics labelling it as a successful breakup song." → "received positive reviews from music critics and was often selected by them as one of the best tracks on Tragic Kingdom, with critics labelling it as a successful breakup track." as a proper overview of the reception is needed
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Remove wikilink to Record chart
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"and Canada and peaking at" → "and Canada, and peaking at"
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Name the chart of New Zealand in the lead
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"directed the music video for “Excuse Me Mr.” during" → "directed the accompanying music video in"
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"It features two different storylines: the first shows" → "The visual features two different storylines, with the first showing"
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"crowded with paparazzi while the second" → "crowded with paparazzi, while the second storyline"
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"No Doubt has performed "Excuse Me Mr." at" → "No Doubt have performed the song for"
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"while serving as the guest musical act on Saturday Night Live" → "on Saturday Night Live while serving as the guest musical act" since otherwise it sounds like they were guests on the latter tour
"while their producer" → "while the song's producer"
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"and produced by" → "while produced by"
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Remove wikilinks to No Doubt and Tragic Kingdom
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Reword the second sentence to mentioning the exact release date of the album, and what position the track was released from on it; something like this.
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"which was the group's first record" → "which was the band's first record"
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"the band members" → "the members of No Doubt"
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"that helped popularize No Doubt" → "that helped popularize the band"
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"stated that this allowed" → "stated that it allowed"
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"but the band members" → "but the members"
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"with their then-producer, Wilder, who wanted the group" → "with their then-producer Wilder, who wanted the band"
"Several critics described "Excuse Me Mr." as one of the highlights on Tragic Kingdom." → ""Excuse Me Mr." was met with positive reviews from music critics, with several describing it as one of the highlights on Tragic Kingdom."
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Remove wikilink on The A.V. Club
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"reanalyzed Tragic Kingdom" → "reanalyzed it"
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"noted that all three of them" → "noted that all three of the songs"
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"as a banger that" → "as a "banger" that"
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"over twenty years ago; she also selected it" → "over 20 years ago; she also selected the track"
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"With a similar opinion," → "Expressing a similar opinion,"
"she also classified it as" → "she also classified the track as"
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"MTV News's Diblasi was impressed by" → "Diblasi was impressed by"
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"on the parent album" → "on the album" since we already know what album you are referencing
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"due to its ability" → "because of its ability"
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"In the United States" → "In the US"
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"but it did reach the" → "though did reach the"
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"where it debuted at" → "with the track debuting at"
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"27; similarly, it became" → "27. Similarly, it became" since the sentence currently needs splitting
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"During its ninth week within the rankings, it reached" → "During its 9th week within the rankings, the track reached" as MOS:NUM suggests using the same numbering for comparative values like this to 12
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"on March 31, 1997" → "on 31 March 1997"
We discussed this above.
"in United States and Canada" → "in the United States and Canada"
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"On May 25, 1997," → "On 25 May 1997,"
We also discussed this above.
Name the New Zealand chart properly with the appropriate wikilink/target
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"Four weeks later it reached its peak at number 11, becoming the fourth top 40" → "The track ultimately peaked at number 11, becoming the 4th top 40"
Kyle Peake – Thanks for your cooperation. I have recently conpleted addressing your comments and I have left numerous responses for you above. Let me know if there is anything else I can do, Carbrera (talk) 03:42, 11 June 2020 (UTC).Reply