Talk:Explorers on the Moon

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 11:31, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

I will review this article. Thank you.  — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 11:31, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Lede

• "Explorers on the Moon (French: On a marché sur la Lune) is the seventeenth of The Adventures of Tintin, " — Seventeenth what?
  • Volume! I have no idea how I missed that. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
• "who are aboard a manner rocket mission to the moon." — Do you mean "manned rocket"? Sounds better than "manner rocket", which might make the reader feel that the rocket lacks mannerisms! LOL.
  • Well spotted! Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
• "of the story. The story was" — Avoid repetition of story.
  • I've gone with "volume" here although would be up for any alternative suggestions. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Synopsis

• "disrupting the artificial gravity and sending everyone floating" — Wikilinks for "artificial gravity" and "floating" could be better for those readers who are not wholly aware of the two terms. For clarity's sake.
  • Good point! I've added a link to the former although could not find an appropriate link for "floating". Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Found the link for 'floating' myself.  — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 03:13, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

• A simpler word for "fissure" would be good as the word seems a tad complicated. Maybe chasm?
  • I've gone with chasm, although I think that it is probably on a similar level to fissure. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Actually, chasm is a synonym of fissure, which sounded more scientific and some readers might not understand it well.  — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 03:13, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

History

• "Publishers were unhappy" — Who? Casterman or Turner and Cooper?
  • That would be Casterman. I've changed it. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Thats about it from me. Once again, great job, Midnightblueowl. Do ping me when you have resolved the comments.  — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 12:24, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

That's great Ssven2; many thanks! Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.

   Pass or Fail:

@Midnightblueowl: Thank you for resolving them, Midnightblueowl. Congratulations!  — Ssven2 ^{Speak 2 me} 03:15, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

Bob de Moor

How come we have a GA on this book which doesn't even mention Bob de Moor? Seems like a serious oversight. Destination Moon (comics), also a GA, does mention him (the fact that he got hired), but again nothing further. According to Pierre Assouline, De Moor already played a "pivotal role" in Destination Moon (backgorunds, and the rocket!)[1], and we all know how much the Moon landscapes by De Moor were essential in the look of the "Explorers" story. The De Moor biography has more information[2]. Fram (talk) 08:26, 5 April 2017 (UTC)