Talk:Final Fantasy Type-0/GA1
Latest comment: 9 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 16:51, 20 September 2015 (UTC)
Is it bad that I've never played a Final Fantasy before? JAGUAR 16:51, 20 September 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments
edit- "It was released in Japan in October 2011" - exact date not given here
- I think a little more on criticisms/praise should be included in the lead. "Type-0 has received strong sales and positive reception in Japan" is quite vague. You could mention that the AI and camera were criticised?
- "players unlock a New Game+ option" - 'New Game+' should be in quotes, given the plus sign
- "Characters can continue to level up through activities within the Peristylium while the PSP is in sleep mode, the cartridge was plugged in and the PSP is charging" - what cartridge?
- "Developers had been planning a release on the next generation of cell phones" - use either "mobile phones" or "cell phones" throughout for consistency
- "A Collector's edition of Type-0" - unless it's the actual official name of the edition, I don't think "collector's" need to be capitalised here
- "On November 2011, a manga adaptation" - In November 2011
- "the action-oriented battle system made it "a very different Final Fantasy."." - double full stops
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editOn hold
editIt's a very well written article, nice work with this. I only found minor prose issues and I feel the need that the reception could be expanded a little in the lead. Other than that, pretty flawless. Once all of the above are addressed then this should have no problem passing JAGUAR 15:26, 21 September 2015 (UTC)
- All issues addressed. --ProtoDrake (talk) 15:47, 21 September 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks. This should be good to go. JAGUAR 15:51, 21 September 2015 (UTC)