Talk:Fluor Corporation/GA1

GA Review

Article promoted - 13 July 2014.

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch Reviewer: TLSuda (talk · contribs) 19:02, 8 July 2014 (UTC) Greetings! I know you've waited a few months for a review, but I have good news! I'm stuck in a tin can for 5 hours tomorrow late night UTC, so I'm going to use that time wisely to review this article. I expect to have the review posted in the early morning hours UTC the following day. (Approximately less than 36 hours from this post.) I look forward to reading and reviewing this article. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 18:15, 8 July 2014 (UTC) Thanks User:TLSuda! One thing I will point out about this article is that as a construction company (as oppose to tech, internet or something more modern) it is not a buzzy topic that gets as much media coverage as you would expect for a Fortune 500 company, so some of the sources are a little weak or non-traditional (for example, I found a government report that summarized their most significant government contracts). I think I have used good judgement in these cases, but I'll see what you think in 36 hours! CorporateM (Talk) 19:47, 8 July 2014 (UTC) Hey @CorporateM: sorry about the extreme delay. Internet has been spotty where I've been staying, so I've only been posting responses as I can. Here's my review. Take your time in responding if you need it. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Initial review GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria Is it reasonably well written? A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors: B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists: Is it factually accurate and verifiable? A. Has an appropriate reference section: B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: C. No original research: Is it broad in its coverage? A. Major aspects: B. Focused: Is it neutral? Fair representation without bias: Is it stable? No edit wars, etc: Does it contain images to illustrate the topic? A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: Overall: Pass or Fail: Almost there, just a few small things to consider. See prose review below. TLSuda (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Prose review Lead "global services" does not need quotes around it.  Done It's actually the name of the division, so I put it in title-caps, etc., which should do the trick CorporateM (Talk) 15:35, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Early history "President" should be lowercase when referring to the position and not using it as a title. IE President Obama vs Obama is president.  Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:39, 13 July 2014 (UTC) "Business declined rapidly during the Great Depression and picked up again during World War II" change "and" to "yet", it flows better  Done I used "but" does that work? CorporateM (Talk) 15:39, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Spell out United States or write it as U.S. in the next sentence.  Done I just want to verify that the president in 1952's name was Si Fluor and that it isn't typo.  Done The source says "John Simon "Si" Fluor Jr." which is what I have now placed in the text. CorporateM (Talk) 15:43, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Diversification and restructuring Add a comma after "In 1972..."  Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:43, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Same for US as above.  Done "Fluor's international business rebounded." When? What business? I assume sometime after 1987, but it is unclear.  Done Changed to "revenues" to make it more clear. CorporateM (Talk) 15:58, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Recent history Add a comma after "In the 1990s..."  Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:47, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Organization Fix US  Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:48, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Link CEO to Chief executive officer, as this isn't always the meaning of the acronym  Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:49, 13 July 2014 (UTC) "anticorruption" should be "anti-corruption"  Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:49, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Notable objects US again x 3  Done CorporateM (Talk) 15:51, 13 July 2014 (UTC) Side question Not relevant to the GA discussion, but: Any reason you didn't use more of the parameters of the infobox? Like founder= former_name= area_served= divisions= ? TLSuda (talk) 15:08, 13 July 2014 (UTC)  Done Good question. CorporateM (Talk) 15:54, 13 July 2014 (UTC) And with all of your additional work, I'm very happy to promote this article! Good work @CorporateM:! I'm glad that your work is so high quality and that your COI does not prevent you from being neutral as possible. Cheers, TLSuda (talk) 23:44, 13 July 2014 (UTC)