Talk:Fly High (Ayumi Hamasaki song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 20:09, 27 September 2016 (UTC)Reply

Soon... Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:09, 27 September 2016 (UTC)Reply

Lead

It also served → The recording served
set comma after "second studio album"
physical sales units → remove "sales"
There are two versions of "Fly High"; a radio edit that was composed by HΛL, and an album version composed by Dai Nagao. → Two versions of "Fly High" were made available for consumption—a radio edit composed by HΛL, and the album version managed by Dai Nagao.
was a success in Japan → experienced success in Japan (fancruft)
300,000 unit → plural
word repetition through "units"; alternate with "copies"
An accompanying music video → An accompanying music video for "Fly High"
which featured → and portrayed
link "remix and greatest hits album" to their respective articles on Wiki
conducted by → released by

Infobox

Digital download → digital dowload
Dance music → Dance

Background and release

There are two versions of "Fly High"; a radio edit that was composed by HΛL, and an album version composed by Dai Nagao → same as lead
that is heavily influenced throughout → that heavily influences
set a comma after "studio album"
The song's instrumentation consists of synthesizers and keyboards by HΛL, an electric guitar by Naoya Akimoto, and eventually mastered and co-produced by Japanese musician Naoto Suzuki and Nagao. → The song's instrumentation consists of synthesizers and keyboards managed by HΛL, while also incorporating an electric guitar provided by Naoya Akimoto. "Fly High" was eventually mastered and co-produced by Japanese musician Naoto Suzuki, and Nagao.
introduction track → opening track
which adrupts in order to start "Fly High". → no sense; reword
her first single inside the 2000s decade → marking her first single in the 2000s decade
physical sales units → remove "sales"
and the final overall single from the album. → overfluous; remove
Then in mid-2000, → Subsequently, in mid 2000,
it included HΛL's 2000 remix on side one, and the orchestral version on side two → incorporated HAL's 2000 remix of the recording and an orchestral version.
The CD did not include a booklet, so the photograph immolated as a picture disc but did feature a clear plastic sheet that featured information about the single → Remember what you did on "Karariya"? You may re-word it as it.

Reception

DJ's → disc jockeys
Remove "However"
whom contributed to writing Hamasaki's biography on the website → who contributed in writing Hamasaki's biography on the website
was a success → experienced success (fancruft)
week of sales → week of availability
It lasted → "Fly High" lasted (word rep.)
on the top 200, one of Hamasaki's lowest spanning singles in that chart. → within the top 200, marking one of the singer's lowest-spanning singles in that chart.
(TBS). It lasted six weeks in the top 100. → (TBS), being present for six editions within the top 100 positions.
of 2000, it had sold → of 2000, "Fly High" had sold (word rep.)
and ranked → and was ranked
chart; the single was behind four other singles released by Hamasaki. → chart, being placed behind four other songs by Hamasaki
Similarly, it ranked → Similarly, it charted
TBS' Annual Chart → TBS' year-end chart
As of July 2016, "Fly" is her 26th highest selling single based on Oricon Style's data base. → It was reported in July 2016 that "Fly High" remains her 26th highest-selling single in the territory based on Oricon Style's database.

Music video and promotion

As always, I prefer editing the synopsis myself before passing to GA.
set a comma after the last mention of "compilation album" in the first para
promoted on compilation albums → promoted through compilation albums
Hamasaki. It has been included → Hamasaki; it has been added
on 11 of Hamasaki's remix albums → on eleven of the singer's remix albums
greatest hits album → plural
onto Hamasaki's remix → onto the tracklist of her remix

Personnel

Rename section into "Credits and personnel"
the CD liner notes of "Fly High"; → the single's physical release.
Link important words in this section at their first instance, such as "songwriting"...

Charts

Yearly chart → plural

Release history

Unlink labels as usual and use scope="row" for countries
There is currently insufficient evidence to determine what date Hamasaki's digital releases appeared on online retails. The closest source for iTunes Store evidence is at Jame World, whom confirmed Hamasaki's work was released worldwide on iTunes in September 2008 → Modify this as in "Karariya"

Outcome

I've put this On hold for 7 days. Good luck with editing and don't forget to ping me when you're ready with all or need help. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:51, 30 September 2016 (UTC)Reply
- @Cartoon network freak: All done with the adjustments. CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 07:49, 6 October 2016 (UTC)Reply
  - Passing! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:04, 6 October 2016 (UTC)Reply

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