Talk:Fragments of Him/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GamerPro64 (talk · contribs) 01:50, 17 September 2016 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article soon. GamerPro64 01:50, 17 September 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• I can't find any evidence that this game is an RPG. Sure RPGFan reviewed the game but they don't have it labeled as an RPG in their review. It's Steam page has it as a walking simulator but doesn't have it as an RPG.

Removed. I can't remember adding that as it's not in the infobox.

Gameplay

• "with the player triggering snippets of narration by clicking on highlighted objects, after which the object disappears." The source didn't say anything about objects disappearing after you click on it. Watched a video of the game and the disappearing thing doesn't seem to be a thing in the game.

I must've read the sources wrong. It turns out clicking on people can make them disappear and reappear, not random objects.

• "The narrative is in the first-person." This sentence should be part of the beginning of the first paragraph.

Done.

Development and release

• "The game was released on the web gaming portal Kongregate in 2013." Maybe more that Giant Bomb link down to this sentence.

Sorry, what do you mean by this?

I meant move instead of more. You're good on this end. GamerPro64 13:33, 19 September 2016 (UTC)

• "during the 2016 Game Developers Conference (GDC 2016)" Any reason for the parenthesis?

Typically the Game Developers Conference is abbreviated to GDC. Although because it's not mentioned anywhere else in the article, I've removed it.

• There's something about reading the second section that bothers me as you mention Nathan Grayson writing for Kotaku but the Rock, Paper, Shotgun article was also written by Grayson. Don't know what else to say about that really.

Don't really know how to fix this.

Not really something to fix. Just something I noticed. GamerPro64 13:33, 19 September 2016 (UTC)

• I think have the development information should be before the information of the games release in this section.

Rearranged.

Reception

• I don't think the Eurogamer link calls the game boring. Might be wrong though.

Copyedited.

• Any chance there's information on its sales?

Nope. I've checked all the given references, the official site, the Steam page and tried a few google searches and they all came up with nothing.

Very well written all things considered. I think once the comments are addressed this can pass. GamerPro64 01:27, 19 September 2016 (UTC)

@GamerPro64: Thanks for the review. I think I've covered everything you've mentioned, except a couple. -- Anarchyte (work | talk) 06:53, 19 September 2016 (UTC)

Okay. I think we're all good now. Promoting this article to GA status. GamerPro64 13:33, 19 September 2016 (UTC)