Talk:Frank Worsley/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 18:10, 7 June 2013 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:10, 7 June 2013 (UTC)

• The proper designation of his P-boat was PC.61. PQ was only an informal name.
• Hyphens in 13-year-old.
• No "the" on the HMS Sparrow or HMS Pangloss
• Link torpedo(es), monitor
• What does this mean? The fortuitous weather on the day of departure from the island meant that he was able to ensure that his chronometer was rated.
• Take out the hyphen by removing the |adj=on from the template 22-foot (6.7 m)
• What does this mean? Tugboat? tug steamer
• What kind of ship was Pangloss?
• Change skippered to commanded.
• along British coast "the" coast
• Add hyphen diesel engined and 15 man
• typo propellor--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:58, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
• No DABs, external links good, pics appropriately licensed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:26, 12 June 2013 (UTC)

Many thanks for the review, I think I have addressed all the points noted above. Zawed (talk) 09:24, 12 June 2013 (UTC)

Be sure to use PC.61, the period between them matters. Also you're using the ship's name far too often in close conjunction. I normally use a mixture of the name, "she" and "the ship" in rotation to keep from numbing repetition. And add a hyphen for compound adjectives like "steel hulled".--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:06, 12 June 2013 (UTC)

Revised some more. Hopefully it is satisfactory now. Zawed (talk) 01:22, 13 June 2013 (UTC)