Talk:Frederick Langenheim/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

Shall review this. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Wikilink Niagra Falls in the lead

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:40, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Early life

• Is there any information about his parents?

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:55, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Mid life and career

• "Langenheim and his brother William began working in 1840" - I believe the text in bold might be better off placed at the start or the end of the sentence it is part of

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:40, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "Langenheim acquired a daguerreotype camera in 1841 from Von Voigtlander" - the text in bold is better off placed at the end of this text

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:40, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink photography studio to the relevant article

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:40, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink Philadelphia Exchange Building to the appropriate article

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:40, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• Mention who Louis Jacques Mandé Daguerre to the uninitiated

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "The seventh set was given to United States president James Knox Polk.[15] The eighth set was retained by the Langenheim brothers.[10]" - consider merging these two sentences together

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "There were eight phases taken of different time sequences.[27] They are the earliest known eclipse pictures taken in the United States.[28]" - merging both these sentences might help things here

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "1.25 inches high by 1 inch wide (3.2 cm × 2.5 cm)" - would believe the is still better than writing it out in plain

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "2.8125 inches high by 2.3125 inches wide (7.2 cm × 5.9 cm)" - same issue as above

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "(2.8125 inches high" - the opening parentheses isn't needed here

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Later life and death

• Added the place where Langenheim died in the sentence mentioning the date of his death

 Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Sources

• "Craig, John S. (1994). Craig's Daguerreian Registry. John S. Craig." - the ISBN number is missing here

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:28, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• "Witkin, Lee D. (1979). The photograph collector's guide. New York Graphic Society." - the ISBN looks like it is missing

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:28, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Am going to put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 07:53, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• @MWright96: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:58, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

• @Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 18:45, 23 August 2020 (UTC)