Talk:French battleship Strasbourg/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 04:12, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

This article is in good shape. A few comments from me:

• in the lead, suggest "and later the Germans"→"and was later seized by the Germans"
  • How about "taken" instead of repeating "seize"?
• "attempting to produce a satisfactory design to fill 70,000 tons as allowed by the treaty" does this mean to accommodate two or three ships within the 70K or something else?
  • Yeah, the intention was to build multiple ships - the 17,500-tonners would have allowed 4 ships to be built within the allotted tonnage
    • How about "attempting to produce a satisfactory design which would allow several ships to be built within the 70,000-ton limit allowed by the treaty"? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:29, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
      • Works for me. Parsecboy (talk) 09:20, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
• link battlecruiser
  • Done
• suggest sigfig=2 for the protected cruiser gun conversions
  • Fixed
• drop the second conversion of 305 mm
  • Done
• knots in full and linked at first mention
  • Done
• convert the 330 mm guns
  • Done
• link ship class
  • Done
• suggest "final Dunkerque"→"final Dunkerque-class design" there is another instance of this
  • Works for me
• suggest sigfig'ing the beam conversion to get rid of the decimal place
  • Fixed
• the secondary battery description in the infobox isn't clear
  • Fixed
• perhaps describe the layout of the rear quad turrets, as this seems a unique set-up
  • Good idea
• suggest stating that the twin turrets were on the sides just forward of the funnel
  • Done
• if you convert 330 mm earlier, you could drop the conversion of the turret armour
  • Done

More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:30, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

• it is a bit off-putting that both 280 mm and 270 mm round to 11 in, could you go an extra sigfig?
  • Good catch
• you could link desk (ship) but perhaps it is too common a term
  • Nah, that's a good link
• "That day, she was docked" dry-docked? and link?
  • Good idea
• link Brittany?
  • Done
• suggest linking light cruiser and destroyer
  • Good catch
• "pocket battleship"s→"pocket battleships"
  • Fixed
• "ordered his ships to return to point" port?
  • Good catch
• link Béarn and say what sort of ship she was
  • Done
• suggest linking heavy cruiser
  • Done
• suggest being consistent with the diacritic on Mers-el-Kébir
  • Fixed
• say who Darlan was and link
  • Good catch
• "On 5 November, Strasbourg, all all of the cruisers"
  • Fixed
• "She had to be docked for repairs" dry-docked?
  • Sure
• suggest "The vesselStrasbourg appeared to be undamaged"
  • Done
• Seaforth Punblishing
  • Whoops!
• the licensing of File:Croiseur de bataille Strasbourg 03-07-1940.jpg isn't right
  • I don't know about that - it appears to have been uploaded by the creator's descendant, and they'd be the holders of the copyright for a private photo, so they can release it as far as I'm aware.
    • Doh. Totally missed that. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 00:31, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
• is there a source for the ship movement/attack info on File:Attack on Mers-el-Kébir map-es.svg?
  • It's very clearly based on the map Jordan & Dumas have in their book, I've added it to the description page.

That's me done. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:32, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

Thanks PM. Parsecboy (talk) 14:36, 28 May 2019 (UTC)

This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by an appropriately licensed image with an appropriate caption. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:37, 29 May 2019 (UTC)