Talk:French battleship Vérité/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 15:58, 13 September 2012 (UTC)

• I'll review this soon. MathewTownsend (talk) 15:58, 13 September 2012 (UTC)

review

• "along with the rest of the French Mediterranean Fleet. She spent the rest based at Corfu" - "rest" (meaning the rest of the fleet) and "rest" (meaning rest of war?)
  • Yeah, it should be "rest of the war".
• "revolutionary British battleship HMS Dreadnought" - perhaps other words for "revolutionary" include "radically innovative design" or others - since you use these exact works repeatedly in multiple articles

• e.g. French battleship Démocratie, Liberté class battleship, French battleship Justice, French battleship Vérité
• to me it begins to look forumulaic? do you agree?

• Yes, the design section is generally boilerplate that is customized as necessary, since it's mostly dry technical information.

• "She displaced up to 14,489 metric tons (14,260 long tons; 15,971 short tons) at full load. She had a crew of between 739 and 769 officers and enlisted men. She was powered by three vertical triple expansion engines with twenty-two Belleville boilers."
  • Fixed.
• "The three ships, representing France during the celebrations and commanded by Admiral Jules le Pord, were the first foreign ships to arrive.[4] The ships departed from Brest and arrived New York seven days later, having run at an average of 16 knots (30 km/h; 18 mph);" - is this a little out of order? Should the arrival be mentioned before their departure so that "arrived New York" is repeated? - it confused me some
  • The line is more about the endurance of their engines, not so much about the trip itself - I feel it'd be out of place if it were moved earlier in the paragraph. I changed the second "arrived in" to "reached" though.
• "As a result, the fleet was far out of position to catch the German battlecruiser SMS Goeben" - maybe this needs some more context, as was it the ships mission to catch the that German battlecruiser, or am I confused?
  • Should be more clear now - how does it look?
• Caption for the last pic?
  • Added.
• perhaps the situation regarding submarines should be noted - i'm assuming the French had none - were the Austrians the only ones that did?
  • No, the French did have submarines (as I recall, they were the continental power that had bought into the idea of submarines the most before the outbreak of war). I don't know what they were used for (and if they were even used for anything - their crews may have been withdrawn for convoy escorts).
• I've made some copy edits that you're free to revert[1] - I see you fixed a screw up of mine! - wiki is really slow today, makes editing hard! Thanks!

MathewTownsend (talk) 18:17, 15 September 2012 (UTC)

• • All seem fine to me. And yeah, there was some kind of problem with the servers yesterday. Everything should be addressed - let me know if there's something I missed. Thanks for reviewing the article. Parsecboy (talk) 12:12, 16 September 2012 (UTC)

GA review-see WP:WIAGA for criteria (and here for what they are not)

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   a. prose: clear and concise, respects copyright laws, correct spelling and grammar:

   b. complies with MoS for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, summary style and list incorporation:

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   a. provides references to all sources in the section(s) dedicated to footnotes/citations according to the guide to layout:

   b. provides in-line citations from reliable sources where necessary:

   c. no original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   b. it remains focused and does not go into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Does it follow the neutral point of view policy.

   fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   no edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   a. images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   b. images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   pass!

• Congratulations! MathewTownsend (talk) 21:54, 17 September 2012 (UTC)