Talk:French cruiser Marseillaise (1900)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 00:10, 8 August 2020 (UTC)

I will review this article. Djmaschek (talk) 00:10, 8 August 2020 (UTC)

GA Review

Pass. Here is my review. Djmaschek (talk) 04:00, 8 August 2020 (UTC)

Infobox vs. narrative

• The infobox data matches the narrative exactly. Pictures all are in public domain. Long dashes are used where appropriate.

Question

• Roche is listed under References, but not cited. I've been scolded about doing this by reviewers of my articles. However, I looked up WP:NOTES and apparently general references can be listed alongside cited references. So I assume Roche is a general reference. Correct?
  • He's used in cite 13.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 11:54, 8 August 2020 (UTC)

Typos and clarifications

I already edited the following.

• Armament and armor, Paragraph 1, sentence 3 typo: two singe-gun > two single-gun.
• Armament and armor, Paragraph 1, sentence 3 clarity: Half of the 164.7 mm > Four of the 164.7 mm.
• World War I, Paragraph 3, sentence 1 clarity: 18 December > 18 December 1918.
• World War I, Paragraph 3, sentence 2 typo: and was was part > and was part.

Suggestion

The following sentence in the introduction was grammatically correct, but I found it hard to follow because of the distance between "The ship" and the last clause. You don't have to fix it, but please consider...

• The ship returned to the Mediterranean the following year, but was assigned to the 2nd Squadron (3e Escadre), as the units based in northwestern France had been renamed, in 1911, together with two of her sisters.
• SUGGEST: Together with two of her sisters, the ship returned to the Mediterranean the following year, but was assigned to the 2nd Squadron (3e Escadre), as the units based in northwestern France had been renamed in 1911.
  • Good idea, although I've tweaked the wording slightly. And thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 12:01, 8 August 2020 (UTC)