Talk:French cruiser Sully

Latest comment: 13 years ago by AirplanePro in topic GA Review
Good articleFrench cruiser Sully has been listed as one of the Warfare good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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January 2, 2011Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on December 15, 2010.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that the French armored cruiser Sully struck a rock in Halong Bay, French Indochina, in 1905, only eight months after she was completed, and was a total loss?

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Reviewer: CrowzRSA 22:59, 26 December 2010 (UTC)Reply

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  • First thing I noticed was that the lead really needs to be expanded to meet WP:LEAD
    • Not much to work with here as the technical description really can't be summarized in the lead. I've moved her namesake up to the lead to bulk it out. Anything else that you feel should be in the lead?
  • Gloire-class should be linked.
    • Linked in the lead and infobox.
  • 612 officers and men Aren't officers men to? It's very vague to say men.
    • There's a huge social and professional division between officers and enlisted men in the navy. It's a common phrase in naval reference works.
  • References should only go after punctuation
    • All of my references are after punctuation except one which is the middle of a sentence, which is perfectly acceptable according to the MOS.
  • Halong Bay should be linked. AND it is misspelled. It should be Hạ Long Bay
    • Fixed
  • Indochina should be linked
    • Linked in the lead.
  • More about her fate should be included. From my understanding, she was left on the bottom to rust. But it isn't really distinguishable. WikiCopter (tcgsimplecommonslostcvuonau) 03:06, 2 January 2011 (UTC)Reply

That's all I see. I'm placing the article on hold for 7 days. CrowzRSA 01:17, 2 January 2011 (UTC)Reply