Talk:French destroyer Fleuret (1938)/GA1
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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 10:06, 7 September 2019 (UTC)
I will review this shortly. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 10:06, 7 September 2019 (UTC)
Initial comments: G'day, Sturm, looks pretty good. I have the following comments/suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 11:06, 7 September 2019 (UTC)
- the references appear to be reliable (no action required)
- in the lead, the link to "Dakar" has been cut off to just "akar"
- July Attack on Mers-el-Kébir --> "July attack on Mers-el-Kébir"
- I couldn't find the 10 May 1940 commissioning date in the body, although it is mentioned in the infobox
- the armistice with the Germans is mentioned in the lead, but not in the body
- the attack on Mers-el-Kebir is mentioned in the lead, but not the body
- the German occupation of Vichy France is mentioned in the lead, but not in the body
- the lead says it was the Germans who scuttled the ship as a blockship, but they aren't mentioned in the body
- encountered only an unidentified British destroyer: this source says the British destroyer was HMS Wrestler: [1]
- Quite possibly, unfortunately, your source is SPS by non-credentialled people, so not RS--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:38, 8 September 2019 (UTC)
- No worries. AustralianRupert (talk) 09:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
- Quite possibly, unfortunately, your source is SPS by non-credentialled people, so not RS--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:38, 8 September 2019 (UTC)
- do we know who refloated the ship? Was it a private company?
- inconsistent spelling: draft v. draught
- Rohwer is included in the References but not used
- there are no dabs, there are no issues with ext links (there are none)
- "File:Scuttled Le Hardi class NH 110745.tiff": has a PD-US-Navy tag, although it would have been taken at a time when it is unlikely a US sailor would have been able to do so. I think this is ok, if we are saying it was taken by someone working for the organisation as an intelligence agent (I base this on the source page that says " received from the Office of Naval Intelligence"). Is that your take, as well?
- I think that spies count as employees for copyright purposes ;-) See if my changes are satisfactory.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:38, 8 September 2019 (UTC)
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