Talk:French destroyer Le Malin/GA1
Latest comment: 5 years ago by Peacemaker67 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 01:41, 22 September 2019 (UTC)
A few nitpicks:
- Lead
- perhaps link flotilla leader as the more specific target than just destroyer?
- They weren't intended to lead flotillas of destroyers, but rather as high-speed attackers able blow through their opponent's destroyer screen. Much more similar to the RN's Tribals than its flotilla leaders.
- perhaps mention a return to the Med at "She screened French cruisers..."
- link French West Africa
- At "Badly damaged during the attack" I assume she was captured and taken over by the Free French at this point. If so, I'd suggest adding that.
- "After many years in secondary roles" suggest adding that she was a breakwater for 11 years, as "secondary roles" implies being at sea (to me, at least...)
- Body
- perhaps state explicitly that the Mitrailleuse de 13.2 mm (0.52 in) CA Modèle 1929 were Hotchkiss machine guns
- "During her 1942 refit in Casablanca, Le Malin had the aft superstructure remodeled in early 1942" two mentions of 1942, trim one?
- This just needs to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:47, 22 September 2019 (UTC)
- the Le Fantasques or the Le Fantasque's?
- "They departed Toulon on 9 September" if that is right?
- "The Vichy French destroyers" if that is right?
- suggest "Boiler No. 3"
- explicitly mention that she was captured and transferred to the Free French
- "Le Malin fir
inged 80 shells" - link Bizerte
That is all I have. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:09, 22 September 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for the thorough review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:35, 22 September 2019 (UTC)
- No prob. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:41, 23 September 2019 (UTC)