Talk:French ironclad Formidable

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Harrias in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 11:06, 1 March 2020 (UTC)Reply


I'll take a look at this shortly. Harrias talk 11:06, 1 March 2020 (UTC)Reply

Design
  • The infobox states that she was built to plans by "Gordon", but this doesn't appear elsewhere; it needs adding into the prose somewhere.
    • Removed - that was from the old version of the article
Service history
  • "..with a tethered observation balloons.." Should this be singular or plural?
    • Good catch
  • "..along with her sister, Amiral Duperré, Dévastation, Courbet, and Redoutable." Similarly, should this be "sisters"?
    • Oh, no, her sister would be Amiral Baudin - the other ships weren't members of the same class - I'll switch it to avoid confusion
  • The start of the second paragraph of the 1896–1911 section is a bit confusing. At the end of the previous paragraph, we are told that the Northern Squadron has the Formidable plus the four ships in the previous point. However, without any mention of time passing, we are now told that it has "Amiral Baudin, Redoutable, and Amiral Duperré". Presumably this just needs an indication of when it happened for it to make more sense. Harrias talk 11:38, 3 March 2020 (UTC)Reply
    • Clarified
  • "Formidable and the rest of the Northern Squadron were tasked with attacking Cherbourg two days later." I assume this was another mock attack, rather than a real one? Would be worth clarifying.
    • Good idea
Lead
  • "Withdrawn from active duty in 1903, she saw no further service.." The article mentions that she was briefly returned to active service in 1904?
    • Fixed
Images
  • File:Formidable Ballon.png needs a US PD tag.
    • Added
  • The other images are all appropriately tagged.
  • All images had relevant captions, but consider adding alt text, though this is not a requirement for GA.
References
  • The article is thoroughly cited in a consistent and appropriate format.

Overall, a very good article, as expected. Though I have to say, and please don't take this the wrong way, but what a thoroughly dull ship! Harrias talk 11:38, 3 March 2020 (UTC)Reply

Yup, a lot of European ships of this vintage were pretty boring - no major wars to fight, few overseas cruises, etc. - they mostly spent their lives churning home waters. Thanks for the review! Parsecboy (talk) 12:47, 3 March 2020 (UTC)Reply
Great work, passing it now. Harrias talk 14:22, 3 March 2020 (UTC)Reply