Talk:Fresh Out the Slammer/GA1

Latest comment: 16 days ago by Medxvo in topic GA Review

GA Review

edit
GA toolbox
Reviewing

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Nominator: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 03:54, 28 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Medxvo (talk · contribs) 22:15, 31 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


  • "New Zealand, and the US" → "New Zealand, and the United States"
  • "Swift performed the song live twice on the Eras Tour in 2024" → "In 2024, Swift performed the song live twice on her sixth concert tour, the Eras Tour"
  • "Swift performed "Fresh Out the Slammer" twice ..." → "In 2024, Swift performed "Fresh Out the Slammer" twice ..."
  • "Swift performed "Fresh Out the Slammer" twice ..." → Perhaps this source can be added since it directly supports the claim?
  • "At the concert in Lisbon, Portugal, on May 24, 2024, she performed the song as part of a mashup with "High Infidelity" from Midnights (2022) on piano" → "At the concert in Lisbon, Portugal, on May 24, she performed the song as part of a piano mashup with "High Infidelity" from Midnights (2022)"
  • "At the concert in Lisbon, Portugal ..." → The Capital source above can also be added here to support the performance's date
  • "She sang the track again as part of a guitar mashup with "You Are in Love" from 1989 (2014) at the concert in Munich, Germany, on July 27, 2024" → "Swift sang the track again as part of a guitar mashup with "You Are in Love" from 1989 (2014) at the concert in Munich, Germany, on July 27"
  • "The Great Gatsby" → "The Great Gatsby (1925)"
  • "Rob Sheffield thought that this part is a reference to The Great Gatsby" → I don't think the source indicate this, the source finds the song stylistically similar to the novel, and then, mentions the song's best line... I think these are two separate things. Maybe we can paraphrase it to "Rob Sheffield found the song's theme and imagery similar to The Great Gatsby (1925)"?
  • "Fresh Out the Slammer" ends with a coda that has a different tempo than the rest of the song; according to American Songwriter's Alex Hopper, the track separates the two relationships both lyrically and sonically, hinting at how "[Swift] feels about them instantly" → Can we separate the two sentences and also indicate that Hopper is also referencing the melody changes here? Maybe "through its melody changes" instead of "sonically"?
  • Most of the references need to be archived
  • Ref 18; subscription access

Everything else looks fine for now :) @Ippantekina: I'll put this   On hold for now until the issues are fixed or discussed. Medxvo (talk) 22:15, 31 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

@Medxvo: thanks for the review! I'll get to this asap. One thing is that I can't access IABot. I tried using it twice but it didn't carry. Could you maybe help me with this? Ippantekina (talk) 03:57, 5 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
Hello @Ippantekina: IABot is currently showing me an "Interface disabled: The maintainers have disabled this interface" message, I'm not sure if this is just for me or is it down? It has been like this for me for 10-11 hours; I have checked multiple times throughout this period. Anyways, I can pass the article once the other issues are addressed since this can be solved anytime and not really a big issue but please make sure to archive them whenever you can :) I'll also try again soon. Medxvo (talk) 14:49, 5 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Medxvo: yeah I had the same problem with IABot, maybe it'll work again in quite some time. Anyways, I've resolved all prose issues :) Let me know if there are outstanding issues that I should address. Ippantekina (talk) 03:37, 6 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
I just fixed one or two things but everything looks amazing anyways! I will  Pass the article now. @Ippantekina: Well done and congratulations! Medxvo (talk) 15:31, 6 November 2024 (UTC)Reply