Talk:Frontier Central School District/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:09, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Copy changes

• , however after 1972 district enrollment began declining — change the comma to a semicolon, add a comma after "however", and move "after 1972" to the end of this block

Done

• document storage, — remove comma

Done

• The school offers over two dozen clubs and activities, over 64 varsity sports teams, and began operating a student-run food truck in 2019 — Change the first comma to an "and" and remove the second.

Done

• The first expansion was in 1993... — Remove the comma after "gymnasium", as "the second in 1998" is not a complete sentence. A ", and" joins two sentences that would otherwise stand alone.

Good to know, thank you

• all students living within 15 miles (24 km) of the school that they attend — unsure what is meant here, there's a missing verb

I looked at the district policy again, and it doesn't make sense to me what they're saying. So I removed it.

Other notes

• Almost all the references are archived. Consider running IABot again for the rest (presumably these were added after or missed by the bot itself, which I know to happen).

For some reason the bot isn't working, but I'll go back and try something else

• I'm left wondering if listing the current principal of each school might be the one place where this gets too detailed? (Certainly the assistant principals are too much!) The by-school summaries are good otherwise. Since it's been a while since you worked on this, it might be worth giving a once-over to find any other elements that could be cruft.

I removed them as it get repetitive

• Copyvio tool catches little more than school names.

Great to hear

• The images by you are fantastic and great work. They're all appropriately tagged, as is the fair use logo in the infobox. The images really add a sense of place to the page that otherwise would be lost.

Thank you very much!

This is a model article on a school district otherwise. It's almost there. Dekema, I'm putting this on hold to address the copy changes suggested above and anything else you find that would be worth a second look coming back to this after three months. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:56, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

@Sammi Brie: I think I'm done with the article for now, minus taking additional pictures. Do you have other suggestions? dekema (Formerly Buffaboy) (talk) 04:00, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

Nope! I just passed it. It looks great. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:03, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! dekema (Formerly Buffaboy) (talk) 04:48, 31 October 2021 (UTC)