Talk:Full Collapse/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 22:04, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

Ahhhh, great band, great album! I'll be taking a look at this GAN. Any section with a  Working tag means that I haven't finished combing through it, but feel free to start making changes as soon as you see them. Kncny11 ^(shoot) 22:04, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

• "It was released on April 10, 2001, through Victory Records. The band signed to Victory Records after leaving Eyeball Records." → "It was releaed on April 10, 2001, through Victory Records, to whom the band signed after leaving Eyeball Records."
• No comma after "several issues with Victory Records"

Background and production

• "Thursday's debut studio album, Waiting, was released" → "Thursday released their debut album, Waiting,"
• WL Waiting (Thursday album)
• "They had multiple people filling in for guitar as they didn't have a permanent second guitarist." → "As they lacked a permanent second guitarist, the band had multiple people filling in on guitar."
• "who's" → "whose"
• "Eyeball was aware that Thursday was outgrowing what support they could provide the band. As a result, they asked other labels to sign the band." → "Eyeball was aware that Thursday was outgrowing what support they could provide, and asked other labels to sign the band."
• "Their debut" → "Waiting"
• ""a situation that we would regret."" → ""a situation that we would regret"." per MOS:LQ
• Which "single person" wrote most of Waiting?

Not mentioned in source. Yeepsi (talk) 08:53, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• Use Rickly's full name and position in the band at his first mention
• "They wrapped up a tour of the United States before going to record a new album." → "They began recording the new album after a US tour."
• WL Jersey City, New Jersey

Music and lyrics

• "as post-hardcore" → "as a post-hardcore release"
• "switches from" → "switches between"
• Remove comma after "typical traits of emo"
• WL first instance of "Understanding in a Car Crash" in the body
• "and subsequently visiting the hospital" → "and his subsequent visit to the hospital"
• ""within the realm of hardcore."" → ""within the realm of hardcore"." per MOS:LQ

Release

• "On February 5, 2001, Full Collapse was announced for release for two months later." → "Thursday announced Full Collapse on February 5, 2001, for release two months later."
• No comma after "April 10, 2001"
• "The band hoped" → "the band hoped"
• No commas around "Tony Brummel"
• WL Tony Brummel
• "1-page" → "one-page" per MOS:NUMBERS
• "After three shows part of the Warped Tour" → "After three shows with Warped Tour"
• When was the "Cross Out the Eyes" music video released?

Specific date not mentioned in source. Yeepsi (talk) 08:53, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• Split sentence beginning "In February 2002" into two sentences at the dash.
• "During the same month" → "The same month,"
• Replace em dash in "Canada-US border" with en dash
• "detailing the internal problems" → "detailing their internal problems"
• Comma after "album art for Full Collapse"
• Comma after "Thursday-branded whoopee cushions"
• Comma after "regarding art direction and promotion"
• "Thursday wasn't" → "Thursday was not" per MOS:N'T
• "Only allowed them to leave Victory for a major label"
• "The band appeared at the Bizarre ..."
• "weren't planning" → "were not planning" per MOS:N'T

Critical reception

• "AbsolutePunk writes that" → "AbsolutePunk wrote that"
• "He says the" → "He said that the"
• ""matter of mere seconds."" → ""matter of mere seconds"." per MOS:LQ
• No commas around "Aubin Paul"
• "Aubin Paul says the" → "Aubin Paul said the"
• "He adds that" → "He added that"
• "DaveyBoy says that" → "DaveyBoy said that"
• ""most immediate album of all time,"" → ""most immediate album of all time"," per MOS:LQ
• ""hardly put a foot wrong."" → ""hardly put a foot wrong"." per MOS:LQ
• "He praises the musicianship" → "He praised the musicianship"
• "Hiller finds that" → "Hiller found that"
• ""screamy, then brutal."" → ""screamy, then brutal"." per MOS:LQ
• "Exclaim! writes that" → "Exclaim! wrote that"
• Pipe Quicksand to Quicksand (American band)
• WL Sense Field
• ""and Sense Field."" → ""and Sense Field"."
• "Jonah Bayer says" → "Jonah Bayer said"
• "Edwards finds" → "Edwards found"
• "He notes" → "He noted"
• "Morris writes" → "Morris wrote"
• ""generating intelligent music,"" → ""generating intelligent music"," per MOS:LQ
• ""unexciting or blasé."" → ""unexciting or blasé"." per MOS:LQ
• "He says" → "He said"
• ""not being overbearing."" → ""not being overbearing"." per MOS:LQ
• "Carr says that" → "Carr said that"
• "Magazine writes that" → "Magazine wrote that"
• ""moments of interest."" → ""moments of interest"." per MOS:LQ

Commercial performance and legacy

• Move ref [47] to the end of the first sentence rather than the second
• "In February 2009, it was announced that the band would perform the album in its entirety" → "In February 2009, Thursday announced that they would perform Full Collapse in its entirety"

Track listing, personnel, and charts

• Include songwriters in the track listing

Writer credits aren't mentioned in the booklet. Yeepsi (talk) 08:53, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

• Pipe "producer" to Record producer
• Pipe "engineer" to Audio engineer
• Pipe "mixing" to Mixing engineer
• Pipe "mastering" to Mastering engineer

References

• In ref [7], the author is listed as the work, and the work (Rolling Stone) is not mentioned at all

General comments

• Image is fair use and appropriate
• Article is stable

 On hold until issues are fixed.

Made the changes. Yeepsi (talk) 08:53, 29 March 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for making those! Passing now. Kncny11 ^(shoot) 01:51, 31 March 2021 (UTC)