Talk:Future Nostalgia (song)/GA1
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GA Review
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 14:56, 22 June 2020 (UTC)
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After your reviewing of my article "Wouldn't Leave", I'll follow up by taking this on. --Kyle Peake (talk) 14:56, 22 June 2020 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
edit- Cover art needs alt text
- WP:OVERLINK of Dua Lipa under Songwriter(s)
- Target to Future Nostalgia should solely be on "of the same name"
- "included as the album's opening track" → "included as the opening track" since we know that's on the album
- "It was released on 13 December 2019" → "It was released for digital download and streaming on 13 December 2019"
- Target promotional single to Promotional recording
- "from Future Nostalgia as well as being serviced" → "from the album, while serviced"
- "the same day" → "that same day"
- ""Future Nostalgia" is a" → "the song is a"
- "electro and funk" → "electro, and funk"
- "song containing elements" → "track that contains elements"
- The critical reception sentence should start the second para instead
- "Upon its release, "Future Nostalgia" entered official" → "Upon its release, the song debuted on record"
- "UK downloads" → "UK Downloads" with the appropriate target
- Target music critics to Music journalism
- "After the release of its parent album" → "Following the release of Future Nostalgia" since italicisation clearly shows it is about the album instead
- "Slovakia and Spain" → "Slovakia, and Spain"
- "from music critics with many commenting on the song's" → "from music critics, with many commenting on the"
- "It received a lyric video on" → "A lyric video was released for it on"
Done all
Writing and production
edit- "Lipa alongside Clarence Coffee Jr" → "Lipa, alongside Clarence Coffee Jr."
- "how they wanted work together" → "how they wanted to work together"
- "They had not worked together previously, although, Lipa" → "The two had not collaborated previously, although Lipa"
- "a fan of his due" → "a fan of Bhasker due"
- "some sessions with him" → "some sessions together"
- "overly confident as well as" → "overly confident, as well as"
- "then suggested that they attempt" → "then suggested them attempting"
- "something bold so Bhasker" → "something bold, so Bhasker"
- Target experimental to Experimental music
- "and Lipa began writing down lyrics" → "and she began writing down lyrics"
- "half of the song, they got" → "half of "Future Nostalgia", the two of them got"
- "so Lipa called Clarence Coffee Jr" → "which lead to Lipa calling Clarence Coffee Jr."
- "they came up with" does this refer to those three studio members or the two music artists?
- This refers to all three studio members.
- Copyedited for you --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:13, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
- This refers to all three studio members.
- "Lipa placed it as" → "Lipa decided on placing the song as"
- "due to it's fearlessness" → "due to its fearlessness"
Done all
Music and lyrics
edit- Target chorus to Refrain on the audio sample text, feminist to Feminism and wikilink Falsetto to itself
- "by Lipa as well as" → "by Lipa, as well as"
- Add ref(s) on the sample's text for verifying that info even though it is already written out in the section's prose
- Target chorus to Refrain
- Wikilink post-chorus to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
- Target bridge to Bridge (music)
- "It's verses only use one chord, D5, while the song" → "The verses use solely the D5 chord, while the track" with the target
- Target synths to Synthesizer
- [14][15][16][17][18] is too many refs next to each other; like you have done for [13], place them after the relevant info where there is commas
- Add wikilink on drum machines
- "features a rhythm guitar" → "features rhythm guitar" with the wikilink
- "to D5 and she makes" → "to D5, and she makes"
- "spoken-word verses as well as" → "spoken word verses as well as" with the wikilink
- [12][5][20] should be in numerical order
- "backing vocals courtesy of the song's producer, Jeff Bhasker, where" → "backing vocals, courtesy of Bhasker, where"
- [22][16] should be in numerical order
- "the song deals with themes of" → "the song's lyrics deal with the themes of"
- "wrote about "Future Nostalgia"'s lyrics" → "wrote about the lyrics"
- [24][18] should be in numerical order
Done all
Release and promotion
edit- Wikilink lead single to itself
- "from her second studio album Future Nostalgia (2020)" → "from her second studio album Future Nostalgia"
- "it's video release" → "its music video release"
- Target promotional single to Promotional recording
- "in every region.[28] It was released" → "in every region, being released"
- [2][28] should both be solely at the end of the sentence, since it will be the two current ones merged
- Add ""Future Nostalgia" was later included as the first track on Future Nostalgia, released on 26 March 2020" as the first para's last sentence with the ref
- ""Future Nostalgia" received a lyric video that premiered on" → "An accompanying lyric video was released that premiered through"
- "It takes place in a retro" → "It is set in a retro"
- "house in a white shirt" → "house, wearing a white shirt"
- "underwear as well as" → "underwear, as well as"
- Remove the last sentence since YouTube is constantly updating views
Done all
Critical reception
edit- "received mixed to positive reviews from music critics" → "was met with mixed to positive reviews from music critics" with the target
- "what lies ahead"." → "what lies ahead.""
- "He went on to describe it" → "He continued, describing the song"
- Target pop to Pop music
- "as "self-assured" and" → "as "self-assured," and"
- "soundscape" as well as calling it" → "soundscape," while calling it"
- "from it's parent album" → "from the album"
- "In Nylon, Allison Stubblebine wrote" → "Stubblebine wrote"
- "as well a categorizing the song's" → "and categorized the song's"
- The Guardian should be italicised
- "Thomas Stichbury called it" → "Thomas Stichbury labelled it"
- ""it’s a flirty wink" → ""it's a flirty wink"
- Remove target on Clash
- "a positive review saying Lipa" → "a positive review, saying Lipa"
- "its talk-rapped verses" and that" → "its talk-rapped verses," and that"
- "praising it's production and lyrics" → "praising its production and lyrics"
- "criticized "Future Nostalgia" writing that" → "criticized "Future Nostalgia", writing that"
- "her vocals but praised" → "her vocals, but praised"
- "to compare it to" → "to compare it to the music of"
- "listed it as a notable track from it's parent album" → "listed the song as a notable track from Future Nostalgia"
- "Writing for the" → "For the"
- "one of the album’s" → "one of the album's"
- "Writing for Business Insider" → "For Business Insider"
- "called it" → "called the song"
- "on to state that it" → "on to state that the song"
- "a single," it's" → "a single" but it is" with the target
- "categorized Lipa confident and" → "categorized Lipa as confident, while he"
- PopSugar are a gossip website and not a reputable music critic, so remove this review.
- "calling the chorus" → "calling the song's chorus"
- "Writing for Rolling Stone" → "For Rolling Stone"
- "called "Future Nostalgia"" → "called the song"
- "as well as comparing it to" → "and compared it to the music of"
- "DIY and Variety both" → "Writers of both DIY and Variety"
- [43][16] should be put in numerical order
- "In a mixed review from" → "In a mixed review for"
- "backing and one of her" → "backing and one of Lia's"
- "Lipa's vocal style to" → "Lipa's vocal style to that of"
- "Nick Smith called it" → "Nick Smith called the song"
- "brassy" and went on" → "brassy," and went on"
- wikilinked Brassy to Brass instruments
- "compared the song to" → "compared the song to the music of"
- "with it's lyrics and" → "with the lyrics and"
- Wikilink God Is in the TV to itself
- "compared it to" → "compared the song to"
Done all
Personnel
edit- Use
{{spaced ndash}}
so there is the right space between personnel Done
Charts
edit- Weekly chart performance for "Future Nostalgia" → Chart performance for "Future Nostalgia" because there is no year-end chart(s) Done
Release history
edit- Format → Format(s) Done
References
edit- Make sure that all of these archived by using the tool
- Copyvio score looks good at 14.5%
- YouTube should be cited as publisher instead for ref 3
- Apple Music should be cited as publisher on ref 4
- The Ringer should be cited as publisher on ref 5
- AllMusic should be cited as publisher on ref 8
- MTV should be cited as publisher on ref 9
- MOS:QWQ and MOS:CAPS issues with ref 10
- Universal Music Publishing Group should be cited as publisher on ref 11
- MOS:QWQ issues with ref 14
- Idolator should be cited as publisher on ref 15
- MOS:CAPS issues with ref 17
- Cite YouTube as publisher instead for ref 21 with no wikilink and remove Capital FM
- Remove or replace ref 26 since Instagram is an unreliable source
- Ref 29 is missing an accessdate
- YouTube should be cited as publisher on ref 30 with no wikilink
- Idolator should be cited as publisher on ref 31 with no wikilink
- Remove target on Clash for ref 35
- Remove wikilink on PopMatters for ref 36
- Ref 40 is from an unreliable source; remove it
- Remove wikilink on Rolling Stone for ref 42
- MOS:CAPS issues with ref 43
- The Arts Desk should be cited as publisher on ref 45
- Wikilink God Is In The TV on ref 48
- Remove Tidal from the title of ref 50 and Tidal should be cited as publisher
- MOS:CAPS issues with ref 54
- Cite Apple Music as publisher for ref 61 and remove the wikilink, plus add citations for various countries to verify the release was indeed various
- Wikilink The Music Network on ref 62
Done all
Final comments and verdict
edit- On hold until the issues are fixed, nice to review one of your articles though and I look forward to doing more in the future. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:23, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake, thank you so much for reviewing this article. I have addressed all the issues above. Is there anything else you would like me to do? LOVI33 20:07, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
- LOVI33 That was a quick response, thanks a lot. ✓ Pass! --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:13, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake, thank you so much for reviewing this article. I have addressed all the issues above. Is there anything else you would like me to do? LOVI33 20:07, 23 June 2020 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.