Talk:G-Dragon/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:55, 24 January 2011 (UTC)

• Some dab links and a dodgy EL Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:55, 24 January 2011 (UTC)
  • • Fixed all the disambiguation page, also took out the YG Bounce source. As for YesAsia, I think it's a reliable source. It's similar to Amazon.com and has information regarding the album. I take it its reviews are biased, but that's why I didn't use the review on the page and only took the part about its musical genre. AhnSoonKyung (talk) 13:30, 25 January 2011 (UTC)
      • [1] is broken. Adabow (talk · contribs) 00:59, 27 January 2011 (UTC)
      • It's broken? Really? Because I can access it. O.o And I will work on the article this weekend because I have many things to catch up on. Just letting you know. :D AhnSoonKyung (talk) 14:21, 28 January 2011 (UTC)

Lead

• If you cannot find any other free image, crop File:Big Bang In Thailand.JPG
  • Cropped it and upload it.
• Can you merge the infoboxes somehow? Does the Korean one have custom parameters?
  • Unfortunately Korean does not have one.
• The lead needs expanding to encompass all sections
  • Expanded it as much as I could. Please note that it is not sourced because most of the sourcing are within the articles. If this has to be change, please note me.

2000–2009: Early life and debut with Big Bang

• Where/when was he born?
  • Included it in.
• "G-Dragon first caught the interest of Sean of the hip-hop duo Jinusean from YG Entertainment, who later recommended him to CEO Yang Hyun Suk" - Is there a date/year that this happened? Jinusean mentions no "Sean".
  • No mentions of the year in the sources, but it does said when he was 13. The article does mention Sean (his name is in the history section).
• "G-Dragon spent the first year cleaning after the other artists in the record label." - do you mean cleaning a building? Explain further
  • Oops!! Fixed it!!
• Why aren't "La La La" and "We Belong Together" given in Korean?
  • Names that are given in Korean are only for songs whose titles were originally release in Korean but translated to English. "La La La" and "We Belong Together" were originally release as English title songs.

2009–present: Solo and career development

• File:G-Dragon Heartbreaker.ogg needs to be reduced in quality. The sample's caption says "Despite becoming a chart-topper" - how would that have any impact on the controversy?
  • Took that part out.
• Link Mnet Asian Music Awards
  • Done so.
• Top 20 → top twenty
  • Done so.
• "YG Entertainment announced G-Dragon and bandmate T.O.P would release a collaboration album" - past tense, please
  • Fixed it, but please check as I tend to have problems with my past-present tense. :)
• broad-casted → broadcast
  • Done so.
• "The singles were commercial successes: "High High" was a chartopper while "Oh Yeah" and "Knock Out" both peaked at #2 and #3 respectively" - what chart(s)? Also #2 → number two and #3 → number three
  • Changed it. To note, on a another article, I originally wrote chartings out as number three, number two and so on, but was told by an editor to make it #3 and #2 so I was just wondering if there is any rules of thumb about it?
    • MOS:HASH is the relevant page Adabow (talk · contribs) 01:20, 30 January 2011 (UTC)
• "noting how he would "changed many things" - would → had
  • Done so
• "and debuted at number one" on what?
  • Added in the Gaon Chart (the official Korean chart)

Image and artistry

• Link hip-hop to hip-hop music
• "G-Dragon incorporated a mix of dance, hip-hop, and R&B songs into his debut solo album" → G-Dragon incorporated a mix of dance, hip-hop, and R&B songs into his debut solo album, Heartbreaker
  • Done so
• R&B can be linked earlier, and should be linked to contemporary R&B
  • Done so
• "Preferring to penned lyrics that "sound[s] like an actual story,"" → Preferring to pen lyrics that "sound like an actual story,"
  • Done so
• "and "Heartbreaker" and "Butterfly, the latter two for his own solo effort." → and "Heartbreaker" and "Butterfly, which he performed independently
• Done so

Controversy

• This section would be better merged into career
  • Merged it
• "However, EMI, who also has rights to "Right Round" said that they" → However, EMI, the record label that distributed "Right Round", said that they
  • Done so

Awards

• Also include any awards that he was nominated for, but lost
  • Unfortunately the South Korea industry mostly concentrate on winners so I could not find a reliable source on his nominations.

References

• Dates should be formatted consistently, ie either yyyy-mm-dd or Month day, year
  • Changed them
• Only print sources (ie magazines/newspapers) should be italicised
  • Changed it
• Remove the succession boxes, more relevant to the album article
  • Removed it

Summary

Good work, I'll place the review on hold now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 00:59, 27 January 2011 (UTC)

• • I did all that was asked, and hopefully a bit more. Do look it over for corrections. If anything else needs to be change, please note me. Thank you. AhnSoonKyung (talk) 16:08, 29 January 2011 (UTC)
    • OK, it seems to be up to standard now. Just a note – references in English do not need marking so, as it is assumed that refs are English unless otherwise stated. Adabow (talk · contribs) 01:26, 30 January 2011 (UTC)