Talk:Garrett Rivas/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: –Grondemar 16:59, 3 October 2010 (UTC)

 Working Will attempt to complete this review in the next few days. –Grondemar 16:59, 3 October 2010 (UTC)

• The College career section could use some reorganization. The first sentence talks about his All-Big Ten Conference selections in particular years; these mentions would work better at the end of the paragraphs mentioning each of those seasons. The second paragraph, on his career records, would go better at the end of the section, when these career marks would have been finalized.
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:13, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
    • Looking better, thanks. –Grondemar 03:28, 6 October 2010 (UTC)
• The individual season paragraphs talk about highlighted moments in his career, which is good, but don't give a feel for how he was performing day-to-day. A year-by-year statistics table might help here.
  • I can give you complete college stats, but not pro. Is that all right?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:10, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
    • OK, I can understand the obscurity of Arena Football statistics. –Grondemar 03:28, 6 October 2010 (UTC)
• When did he first win the kicking job at Michigan? The freshman year paragraph doesn't say.
  • Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:08, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
• You don't need to link both the overall season and the Michigan football team each year; I'd just link the individual Michigan seasons, since they link to the overall NCAA seasons.
  • This is a common feature in many of my football GAs that I am using here for consistency.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:22, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
    • OK, that works. –Grondemar 03:28, 6 October 2010 (UTC)
• The Pro career season needs expansion. How did he perform in the two Arena Leagues? Why was he cut by the Buccaneers? Another statistical table would help greatly.
  • A pro career table seems like it may be hard to produce. I do not know of any public sources. The AF2 has disbanded and only the most recent season stats are available online. I don't know how to find 2008.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:58, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
    • OK, I understand. I think the pro content currently in there is reasonable. –Grondemar 03:28, 6 October 2010 (UTC)
• The article as a whole needs a copyedit; I'll be willing to do it pending the addressing of the above expansion and re-organization issues.
  • Would be appreciated.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:10, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
    • I'll work on the copyedit over the next couple of days if you can put together the college statistics table. –Grondemar 03:28, 6 October 2010 (UTC)
• An image of him would be nice, although I know that it may not be available and therefore won't insist on it.
  • All of his flickr photos are from sources that have historically not been cooperative with licensing requests.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:58, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
    • OK. –Grondemar 03:28, 6 October 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   This article will be on hold for seven days to allow for the addressing of the above. Note that due to the large number of nominations you currently have in-queue, I will be enforcing this seven-day time limit more strictly that in past reviews.

Thank you. –Grondemar 00:23, 4 October 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for responding and dealing with all issues in a timely fashion. I am passing this article as a Good Article. Congratulations! –Grondemar 04:35, 7 October 2010 (UTC)