Talk:George Boyd (footballer)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:37, 18 November 2010 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:37, 18 November 2010 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:

• "However, a year later" the however probably isn't needed.
• "Boyd was handed his debut" sounds iffy; perhaps just "Boyd made his debut"
• What does feature mean? I presume that means a starting role, but I could be wrong, so link for those who don't really know footy terms.
• "scoring a brace" Also not sure what this means; link or reword.
• Be careful about using words like "impressive" or stuff of that nature; unless the source uses those kinds of words, avoid them. Example is "His fine form continued, scoring four goals.." Four goals is certainly great, but the adjective aren't necessary; the reader can probably figure out that on their own.
• "Due to his impressive form," as noted above, this can be cut.
• "Boyd was named in the England C team" to the
• "Although this caused a degree of controversy," this could be added onto slightly. as it reads now, no way of knowing who found it controversial or why until after i read the ref. Only a little bit needs adding though since nothing came of it.

I'll put the article on hold and pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:10, 20 November 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for taking the time out to review the article, much appreciated. Apologies for the late response, have been very busy as of late! I have made all of the changes you have mentioned above. Let me know if there's anything else. Thanks. --SBFCEdit (talk) 06:41, 24 November 2010 (UTC)

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 00:54, 25 November 2010 (UTC)