Talk:George Livermore/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:32, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- "who had many valuable old books" probably unnecessary.
- Done
- "States. His library included" merge.
- Done
- "included... including" repetitive.
- Done
- spell out Johannes Gutenberg.
- Done
- US not USA in infobox.
- Done
- "Harvard College" link?
- Done
- Cambridgeport (article) or Cambridge (infobox)? Be consistent.
- Done
- "His English ancestor, John Livermore, who emigrated from Ipswich, England to " (heh, I was born there...) + comma after England.
- Done = no wonder your English is so good!
- "United States. [3]" no space before ref.
- Done
- "public and private elementary" links because they mean different things in different countries.
- Done
- "poet Oliver Wendell Holmes" should there be a Sr there?
- Done
- "in 1827-28, when" en-dash.
- Done
- "some eight miles away" convert.
- Done
- "the later part" curiously I normally say "latter".
- Done
- "visited President" he just visited the US Pres?!
- Done
- "In this business he did a lot of traveling" bit colloquial, could be "He traveled extensively for work." or similar.
- Done
- "1834-35, " en-dash.
- Done
- "He enjoyed books ... He enjoyed books..." repetitive.
- Done
- "States.[10] [11]" no space between refs
- Done
- "the "Christian Examiner"' " italics and not in quotes.
- Done
- "the "Cambridge Chronicle"" is that another publication which should be in italics?
- Done
- "time.[10] He wrote hymns for Sunday school children." can you merge this to reduce repetition.
- Done
- " Cromwell's Soldiers' Pocket Bible" again, check italics.
- Done
- "of Coverdale's Bible" our article is called The Coverdale Bible.
- Done
- Link Vulgate.
- Done
- "given to Queen Elizabeth by" Elizabeth I.
- Done
- "were own by Livermore. He owned a copy " owned by Livermore, but need some reword to avoid the quick repeat.
- Done
- "single leaf on vellum" links?
- Done
- "Historical Research - self published (200 pages)." etc, en-dash, not hyphen, check whole list.
- Done
- "at that time he was elected a member of the Phi Beta Kappa Society." you already said that.
- Done
- "He was also a member of the American Academy of Arts and Sciences" and that. Suggest you look at consolidating the Societies and Legacy...
sections.
- Done
- "It included ancient copies of the rare Bibles" you've already covered this adequately.
- Done
- That's all I have on a first read through. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 14:12, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for first read through on the review. I will get started on it, right after lunch.--Doug Coldwell (Get vaccinated... ) 15:01, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --19:57, 30 August 2021 (UTC)