Talk:Georgie Lane/GA1

Latest comment: 2 months ago by Rollinginhisgrave in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Nominator: FishLoveHam (talk · contribs) 19:51, 11 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 05:36, 20 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

I'll be reviewing this for WP:GARC. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:36, 20 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

I've left some comments, I'll do a second sweep of prose review after you work through these comments. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:36, 20 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Prose and content

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Apologies! My mistake, reading too much into it. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:41, 21 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
"lethal drug bandits in the jungle" is very literary. I've tried to reword this but what I'm coming up with is only marginally better. Can leave if you don't have any luck on this front. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:41, 21 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
I'm not sure either, I don't really write media articles. The trouble here is that it's written in-universe. Perhaps: "As the series progresses, it is established that Georgie..." Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:01, 21 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
  Done FishLoveHam (talk) 14:44, 21 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
If the reason is just some PR cliche, you don't really need to include it. Just mention she left. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:01, 21 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
  Done I've kept the reason for leaving, but removed the four years part. FishLoveHam (talk) 14:43, 21 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
overly groomed appearance given the setting? Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:01, 21 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
  Done I'll go with that, thank you! FishLoveHam (talk) 14:41, 21 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:36, 20 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Sources

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Spot check

  • [1]  N Doesn't say she left the show in September, or after the show finished airing.
  • [4]  Y, although "She was surprised by how heavy the weapons used were." is not referring to weapons used in the show, but in boot-training from what I'm reading, so the article text is misleading.
  • [7]  clock It's unclear to me why you've reworded "saying it was her 'favourite scene to film'" to "and noted it as one of her favourite scenes to film."
  • [10]  Y
  • [13]  Y
  • [16]  Y
  • [19]  Y
  • [22]  N This article implies that viewers are warming up to her portrayal, but not really. It seems to be very cautious not to make that claim explicit.
  • [25]  Y
  • [28]  Y
  • [32]  Y

Other

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  • Images: well attributed  Y
  • Broad & summary style  clock too detailed using promo material, needs to be trimmed
  • Neutral  Y balanced enough
  • No OR/COPYVIO  Y 36.3% earwig, quotes
  • Stable  Y

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:45, 20 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

@Rollinginhisgrave: I've done my best to address everything! FishLoveHam (talk) 15:24, 21 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Looking good FishLoveHam, passing :). I responded to your email by the way, not sure if you saw. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 15:27, 21 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

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