Talk:German torpedo boat T22

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Reviewer: Kges1901 (talk · contribs) 01:50, 24 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

The article is well written and comprehensive. A few comments:

  • The Type 39s were fitted with a pair of geared steam turbine sets, each driving one propeller, were designed to produce 32,000 shaft horsepower (24,000 kW) using steam from four high-pressure water-tube boilers which were designed to propel the ships at 33.5 knots (62.0 km/h; 38.6 mph). can be written more concisely as "The Type 39s were propelled by a pair of geared steam turbines powered by four high-pressure water-tube boilers, which created 32,000 shp, giving her a maximum speed of 33.5 knots" In its current form the sentence is unnecessarily repetitious and has an extra 'were' in the first part. Kges1901 (talk) 01:50, 24 November 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • r. Anti-aircraft defense was provided by four 3.7 cm (1.5 in) SK C/30 AA guns in two twin-gun mounts on platforms abaft the rear funnel and six 2 cm (0.8 in) C/38 guns in one quadruple mount on the aft superstructure and a pair of single mounts on the bridge wings. Unnecessary repetition of 'and'
    • Replaced the first "and" with a comma.
  • carry 30 mines (or 60 if the weather was good). I am curious as to why weather affected mine capacity.
  • Is the exact launch date not known?
  • escorted the Italian blockade runner, SS Cortellazzo, Could be less awkward as "escorted Italian blockade runner SS Cortellazzo"
    • Took out the commas.
  • T22, T23, Kondor and the torpedo boats T2 and T5 All of the ships were torpedo boats, so it is not necessary to state 'and torpedo boats'
    • Probably
  • 2nd Torpedo Boat Flotilla with T22, T2, T5, T23, and the torpedo boat T18 Ditto - by definition torpedo boat flotillas contain only torpedo boats. Also, what flotilla was T22 with before this point or was the 2nd Torpedo Boat Flotilla her original assignment?
    • Unknown, sources only occasionally mention composition of the flotillas.
  • Now assigned to the 5th Torpedo Boat Flotlla, T22, Kondor, Falke and the torpedo boats Greif and Möwe Typo and Ditto
  • with torpedoes with complete surprise unnecessary repetition of with

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