Talk:Gertrude Rhinelander Waldo House/GA1
Latest comment: 4 months ago by 750h+ in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Nominator: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 16:21, 6 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 05:51, 18 April 2024 (UTC)
Hello Epicgenius, I'll take this review. 750h+ | Talk 05:51, 18 April 2024 (UTC)
Assessment table
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Lead section
editConstructed from 1894 to 1898, it was designed by Alexander Mackintosh of the architectural firm of Kimball & Thompson.
Might be personal preference, but I feel like "Built between 1894 and 1898" has a better flow. 750h+ | Talk 13:51, 18 April 2024 (UTC)- I have done this. Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
- You might consider linking facade in the second paragraph. 750h+ | Talk 00:11, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
Gertrude Rhinelander Waldo bought the site in 1882 but did not develop it for more than a decade.
change her full name to her last name, as you’ve mentioned her previously. 750h+ | Talk 00:14, 19 April 2024 (UTC)- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
The building became a Ralph Lauren menswear store in 2010.
maybe link it to the Ralph Lauren brand? Might also be personal preference though. 750h+ | Talk 00:17, 19 April 2024 (UTC)- Ralph Lauren is already linked above, so I didn't want to add a WP:DUPLINK for this reason. Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
- Those are my lead complaints.
Site
editThese include 888 Madison Avenue, a 22,000-square-foot (2,000 m2) store completed in 2010 as Ralph Lauren's secondary flagship;[9] it is designed in a Beaux-Arts style with a limestone facade and marble interiors,[10][11] The Rhinelander Mansion shares the block with St. James' Episcopal Church immediately to the south, 36 East 72nd Street to the east, and 740 Park Avenue to the southeast.
Should "The Rhinelander Mansion" have a capital "The"? This sentence might be a bit too long too. 750h+ | Talk 13:51, 19 April 2024 (UTC)- Oops, that was supposed to be two sentences (I accidentally put a comma instead of a period after "interiors"). Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
Architecture
editThe Gertrude Rhinelander Waldo House at 867 Madison Avenue is four and a half stories tall.
You've already mentioned the fact it is at 867 Madison Avenue. Do we need to mention this again? 750h+ | Talk 13:52, 19 April 2024 (UTC)- Nope; I have removed it. Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
A New York Times reporter wrote in 1984
link New York Times. 750h+ | Talk 13:52, 19 April 2024 (UTC)- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
In the basement was a large bowling alley.
Sounds a bit weirdly phrased. I feel like "A large bowling alley was in the basement." 750h+ | Talk 13:52, 19 April 2024 (UTC)- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
The first floor was a large center hall extending one-third the width of the Madison Avenue frontage, with mahogany paneling on the walls and ceiling.
Link Mahogany, if that's right. 750h+ | Talk 13:52, 19 April 2024 (UTC)- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
- Link fluorescent lights. 750h+ | Talk 13:52, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
- Done. Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
- "After the 1980s renovation, it had green walls with portraits; elaborate plasterwork; wood paneling; and vaulted ceilings." Do we really need semi-colons? Or can we replace these with commas? 750h+ | Talk 13:52, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
- I've reworded this to remove the need for a semicolons (otherwise it sounds like the walls had plasterwork, paneling, and vaulted ceilings). Epicgenius (talk) 14:43, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
History
editNews media announced in October 1920…
change this to “The news media announced in October 1920..” 750h+ | Talk 16:07, 19 April 2024 (UTC)The first-floor spaces were divided and leased to various tenants in the 1960s and 1970s.
should there be a dash between first and floor? 750h+ | Talk 16:07, 19 April 2024 (UTC)- Link Women's Wear Daily 750h+ | Talk 16:07, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
Impact
editNothing from me, this is fine.
Image review—pass
editThe prose is excellent. So are the images. The images included are appropriately licensed, so this is an image pass.
Source review
edit- Source 1 OK, checked on each instance of usage, checked via Google Books
- Source 2 OK, checked on each instance of usage, checked via Open Library
- Source 3 OK, checked on each instance of usage
- Source 10 OK, checked on each instance of usage
- Source 20 OK, checked on each instance of usage
- Source 27 OK, checked on each instance of usage
- Source 30 OK, checked on each instance of usage
- Source 48 OK, checked on each instance of usage, Newspapers.com source
- Source 65 OK, checked on each instance of usage
- Source 95 OK, checked on each instance of usage
- Source 120 OK
- Source 121 OK, checked on each instance of usage
- Source 138 OK, checked on each instance of usage
- Source 191 OK, both sources were checked.
Happy to pass the source review.
Verdict
editNo comments left, happy to pass this article for GA status. Great job on it.
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.