Talk:Gillender Building/GA2

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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 21:45, 3 May 2020 (UTC)Reply


Hi, I'm Kingsif, and I'll be doing this review. This is an automated message that helps keep the bot updating the nominated article's talkpage working and allows me to say hi. Feel free to reach out and, if you think the review has gone well, I have some open GA nominations that you could (but are under no obligation to) look at. Kingsif (talk) 21:45, 3 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed
  • History and talk fine
  • Images all licensed correctly
  • Images used well, but perhaps the demolition progress could be a different kind of gallery? They're spaced out so much it doesn't really work
  • Earwig clear
  • Footnote [c] should probably come after both refs
    • Done.
  • The Helen Gillender story seems fine until the mention of Augustus at the end of the paragraph, perhaps I'm confused but is the developer of the building disputed?
    • No, this is a one-off mention by a single source. The Tribune mentioned Augustus briefly in 1905, but Asinari says this never did happen, and the Tribune issued a correction. epicgenius (talk) 00:40, 4 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • The paragraph introduction In December 1909, The New York Times reported a new record set seems unnecessary, and is also confusing until the reader gets halfway through. Just starting "The Manhattan Trust Company..." should be good (adding the date at the end).
    • Done.
  • Asking about the use of "frontage", if you want to link or rephrase it or not
    • Rephrased it.
  • Demolition commenced April 29 → "commenced on"
    • Done.
  • Add comma after "all the scrap"
    • Done.
  • Maybe introduce the New York Times quotation
    • Done.
  • Is Helen Gillender's death related enough for inclusion?
    • Nope, removed.
  • Media section a bit brief (not in content, in style) but probably good enough.

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