Talk:Giselle/GA1
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Reviewer: Tim riley (talk · contribs) 14:27, 31 January 2015 (UTC)
Starting first read-through. More soonest Tim riley talk 14:27, 31 January 2015 (UTC)
- Initial comments
This is borderline Immediate failure (criterion 1 – lack of citations) but I'll put it on hold for this to be addressed. See below for details.
- Some work is also needed before the article meets GA criterion 1a on spelling. The following need attention:
- Slyphide (a misspelling in a caption) Done
- Euryanthé (German name, no aigu wanted) Done
- développé, bourrée, balloné, levé, sauté and jeté (as they should be, but are misspelled in the article) Done
- Valse Favorite de Giselle or Valse favorite de Giselle? We have both at present. The latter is the normal French form. Done
- resemblamce.
- Cannot find "resemblamce". Will look further. SeeSpot Run (talk) 22:00, 31 January 2015 (UTC)
- fiance Done
- You also need to decide whether to use English or American spelling: you have "tumour" but "honored". Either is acceptable, but it should be consistent.
- Cannot find "honored". Will look further. SeeSpot Run (talk) 22:00, 31 January 2015 (UTC)
- No need, as you have Americanised "tumor" and the style is now consistent. Tim riley talk 09:50, 1 February 2015 (UTC)
- Libretto
- This section simply repeats information given earlier and should be removed in toto.
Done Removed. SeeSpot Run (talk) 21:49, 31 January 2015 (UTC)
- Music
- First para – citation needed
{ Done
- Third para – citation needed
Done
- Fourth para – citation needed for last sentence
Done
- Ethnic elements
- Germany – WP:OVERLINK
Done
- Sets and costumes
- First para – lacks citations Done
- Second para – citation needed for second sentence Done
- Sets
- First para – citation needed. And do readers really need to be told that Germany is east of France? Done
- Third para – completely lacking in citations
Done SeeSpot Run (talk) 22:29, 31 January 2015 (UTC)
- Contemporary reviews and comments
- Bizarre outbreak of WP:OVERLINK in the last para: salary, cloth, manufacture and artificial should be unlinked Done
- Characters, plot, and resume of dances in the first performance
- Lacks any citations.
Done Removed.SeeSpot Run (talk) 22:25, 31 January 2015 (UTC)
- Footnotes
- 25: Why the ampersand?
Done
- References
- ISBN lacking for Smith.
Done
If these are put right the article will meet the GA criteria in my judgement. – Tim riley talk 15:55, 31 January 2015 (UTC)
That was quick work! All is now fine, except for two tweaks you need to make: the image caption for Pavlova as Giselle has gone awry, and the section heading "Plot: First performances" is surely wrong, as the section is now solely about the plot. (Or do you mean this was the plot at the first performance but is not the one used later? Worth clarifying it so.) I was minded to ask for sources for your plot summary, but I see there are GAs and even FAs about stage works where the synopses are not cited, and I accept that some sort of precedent has been set for omitting citations for such sections.
Overall summary
editGA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
An interesting and enjoyable article.
- Is it reasonably well written?
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- Good range of sources.
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- Well cited following action above.
- C. No original research:
- A. References to sources:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
- Well illustrated: some delightful pictures.
- A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail: