Talk:Gloire-class cruiser/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 00:09, 13 August 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• "the three cruisers in French waters were assigned to defend Allied shipping in the English Channel and enforce the blockade of Germany while Condé was tasked to hunt down German commerce raiders" - This can give the impression that the other three were cruisers, while Conde was not. As this is not accurate, this should be rephrased.
• Allies of World War I is duplinked

Infobox

• You state directly 28 water tube boilers, but the prose makes it clear only two of the ships had this number. The variance should be reflected in the infobox.
• I'm not finding where the deck and bulkhead armor thickness are cited in the prose.
  • Merde, I meant to add this.
• What exact event marks the end of service date? The article on Conde states that it was decomissioned in 1933, but this information doesn't appear in this article that I can tell.
  • I got the two survivors mixed up.
• I'm not convinced that fates of one lost and four scrapped is the best characterization of what happened. Sully is obviously a lost. However, I'm not convinced that scrapped is the best description of the fate of Conde, as it had been sitting on the seafloor for ten years before the scrapping actually occurred.

Armament

• "Half of the 164.7 mm guns were in two singe-gun wing turrets" - Is singe-gun a typo for single-gun, or is it a technical term I'm not familiar with? I'm assuming probably typo.
  • Must have been some sort of primitive heat ray.

Service history

• "All five of the sisters were initially assigned to the 1st Cruiser Squadron of the Northern Squadron as they commissioned in 1904" - Maybe I'm misunderstanding this. The way I'm reading it, this is implying that all five ships were commissioned in 1904, but the table says one was commissioned in 1903. Am I misunderstanding this?
• "Condé became a barracks ship for the naval infantry (Fusiliers Marins) at Lorient in 1922. In 1928 the ship hosted the Naval Infantry School (École des fusiliers); she was stricken from the naval register on 15 February 1932 and scrapped the following year. - Conde was not sold for scrap in 1933, as it was still extant during the Second World War
• "Marseillaise II on 15 February 1932 and subsequently scrapped." - Specify when the scrapping occurred.

Placing on hold. Hog Farm _Bacon 03:14, 13 August 2020 (UTC)

A little too much of a rush to put this one to bed, I think. Many thanks for your thorough review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:56, 13 August 2020 (UTC)