Talk:Golden Sun/GA1
Latest comment: 7 years ago by ProtoDrake in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 13:49, 27 May 2017 (UTC)
I'll be happy to review this page. If I'm not back with comments in three days, please ping me. --ProtoDrake (talk) 13:49, 27 May 2017 (UTC)
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edit- Maybe put the "|lead=yes" code in the title.
- In the infobox, remove the red link to Shin Yamanouchi.
- "a flat, vaguely circular plane whose oceans perpetually spill off the edge of the world's entire perimeter into what seems to be an endless abyss" - I think you could substitute that comma for an "and"
- You should link the first Golden Sun in its first instance in the development section.
- The music section only covers the first game. Can you confirm any info related to Sakuraba's work on the second and third games?
- "In addition, a medley of music from The Lost Age was also selected to be on Brawl's soundtrack" - Double positive. No need for the "also".
- Is the "Akiba Angels" reference reliable?
- The references are in dire need of attention.
- The 1Up references are dead. You can use WebCite and Archive.is to save them.
- Every IGN link needs archiving or url updating, or both.
- CNET reference needs its url updating.
- Archiving the GameSpot refs is more than advisable.
- General reference maintenance work (linking sites, archiving sources) is more than advisable.
That's everything that caught my eye. Once the above are addressed, I'll give the article a second look and see what happens - until then, I'll put this review on hold. --ProtoDrake (talk) 05:53, 29 May 2017 (UTC)
- Thank you again for taking time to review the page! I've taken a crack at fixing some of your concerns, but I haven't gotten around to them all yet. Apologies in advance for all the external link issues, I usually fix them before sending them off for review; I must have overlooked those this time. When I get more free time, I will research more about the series' music, and will replace the Akiba Angels reference. Otherwise, the links and other fixes should be done! Best, haha169 (talk) 05:18, 1 June 2017 (UTC)
- @Haha169: After due consideration, I've decided to put the article back to on review. That'll give you the extra time needed to handle the remaining elements within your time limits. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:02, 1 June 2017 (UTC)
- @ProtoDrake: I've replaced the AkibaAngels source and re-written the section on the manga. There was only a Spanish-language source available regarding the manga adaptation, so I had to use that. There also isn't much out there regarding the music (outside of fansites), but I've expanded that where I could. I believe all the maintenance work regarding the external links and sources are fixed. Please let me know if there is anything else I can do! --haha169 (talk) 02:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)
- @Haha169: I don't think I'll hold this up any further. I'll give this article a Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 08:09, 2 June 2017 (UTC)
- @ProtoDrake: I've replaced the AkibaAngels source and re-written the section on the manga. There was only a Spanish-language source available regarding the manga adaptation, so I had to use that. There also isn't much out there regarding the music (outside of fansites), but I've expanded that where I could. I believe all the maintenance work regarding the external links and sources are fixed. Please let me know if there is anything else I can do! --haha169 (talk) 02:08, 2 June 2017 (UTC)
- @Haha169: After due consideration, I've decided to put the article back to on review. That'll give you the extra time needed to handle the remaining elements within your time limits. --ProtoDrake (talk) 09:02, 1 June 2017 (UTC)