Talk:Golf Club: Wasteland/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 03:49, 26 November 2021 (UTC)

I will be doing this one.--Alexandra^IDV 03:49, 26 November 2021 (UTC)

Images

• Images are relevant and seem to be in order. I appreciate that you wrote alt text for them!

References

• The RPS writer's name is Katharine, not Katherine.
  • Fixed, thanks for the catch - I have a tendency of typing things out phonetically..
• This is not part of the GA criteria, but I believe the Unity source should have "Unity Technologies" in the publisher parameter rather than the website one, as it is not the name of a creative work.
  • Done
• Looks good otherwise - RSs, and some primary sources for uncontroversial detail.

Infobox

• Milojević, Stanković, and Stepković are only mentioned in the infobox, and not backed up by any sources.
  • Yeah, not sure where that came from either, replaced with just director and composer
• The iOS and Android versions are for some reason not included in the platforms field in the infobox.
  • Fixed - holdover from previous version when I was not aware the mobile releases were a major thing
• "Adventure" and "Role-playing" are only mentioned in the infobox, and not backed up by any sources. As we cannot use own analysis to determine genres, you should either cite a source or remove these (and their corresponding categories).
  • Removed

Lead

• The iOS and Android releases are only given as year and month, while the rest are given as year, month, and day - I would suggest being consistent
  • Set all to YMD
• "the super-rich" comes across as slightly casual wording to me
  • Changed to "extremely wealthy", but no idea if that's any better

Gameplay and synopsis

• There are three "modes" of gameplay - the quotation marks seem unnecessary, as if the modes were "sort of, but not quite" modes.
  • Removed
• We can assume that readers know what "nostalgia" means - I would remove the link.
  • Removed

Development and release

• Would suggest rearranging things slightly for chronology, so that the iOS/Android release dates are mentioned along with the PC and console versions rather than as the first thing the reader learns about the development (Golf Club: Wasteland was developed by Igor Simić [...] also works much better as a topic sentence than The game was released for iOS [...] does).
  • Moved the dated release info and soundtrack addition to last paragraph
• In an interview with Game World Observer, - unless what publication he was interview for is important somehow, I would just remove this bit and just focus on what he said.
  • Removed
• Nitpick, but in order to can almost always be simplified to to.
  • Changed

Reception

• though Ollie Reynolds of Nintendo Life noted that their reviewers found some of the neon signs [...] - is Reynolds not the single person at NL reviewing the game? Unless I'm missing something, I believe this should be written as "though Ollie Reynolds of Nintendo Life found [...]".
  • The review used wording like "we", "us", and "our", though that might just be journalistic. Changed.
• Loades also thought that the level design was uninspired, with the "puzzle" elements - like with the "modes" earlier, this makes me wonder if they're "kind of but not really" puzzles - you can probably remove the quotation marks.
  • Removed quote marks
• he wished the game doubled down on - comes across as too casual wording
  • Reworded

Other

• Without any discussion in the article about games as art, the "see also" link feels like an inappropriate use of "Wikipedia's voice".
  • It was previously linked in the development section as the BI source explicitly stated Igor Simic realised the potential of video games as art. I have re-added a bit into the first paragraph of "Development and release" about that, though it might not flow well - what do you think? I might remove it again.
• The article is not categorized as an iOS or Android game
  • Fixed, also changed 2021 -> 2018 (another remnant from the old structure of the article)

Looks good overall! I left a few notes for you, but they are all fairly minor. I will put this review on hold for the usual seven days - {{ping}} me when you have addressed the above or if you have any questions, and I will be with you as soon as possible! (although I will move this upcoming weekend, so there's a risk I won't be able to respond during Friday-Sunday).--Alexandra^IDV 02:33, 29 November 2021 (UTC)

@Alexandra IDV: Items addressed, see comments above. Thanks for the review! eviolite (talk) 03:16, 29 November 2021 (UTC)

Thank you very much. I will go ahead and promote this now!--Alexandra^IDV 12:30, 30 November 2021 (UTC)