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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Good Girl Gone Bad Live/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 15:54, 14 September 2012 (UTC)

Review

Background and release

• Good.

Technicalities and synopsis

• Good

Documentary

• "She also explains how flying with private jet together with her team which is like "one family" is fun, but also very rare." >> "She also explains how flying in private jet with her team like "one family" is fun, but very rare"

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 17:33, 16 September 2012 (UTC)

• "Scenes of Rihanna performing a show in Ischgl are shown. After the performance Rihanna and part of her team are out on the streets having snowball fight." Could this me merged into a single sentence?

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 17:33, 16 September 2012 (UTC)

• "were touring for a lot of time" >> a lot of time? I think is more proffesional to say "a considerable amout of time" or similar

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 17:33, 16 September 2012 (UTC)

• "and become very close so" >> "and became"

•  Done — Tomica (talk) 17:33, 16 September 2012 (UTC)

Critical reception

• "giving four stars and wrote that" different tenses. Say "gave it four stars and wrote" or "giving four stars and writing"
• "isn't going to win" The way you start the quotation makes a break on the sentence. Better to say that he wrote that "it isn't going to win"
• "their recorded version" it may be "verisons"
• Well. I've read the section and the prose is quite weird. I consider rewriting the entire section with a more cohesive and fluent prose.

•  Done — Tomíca^(T2ME) 17:55, 5 October 2012 (UTC)

Commercial performance

• "before falling to number 19 for the week dated August 16, 2012." 2012?
• "in the United States alone" if you say RIAA, you don't have to write this, as it is redundant.
• "In Australia, Good Girl Gone Bad Live entered the Australian Music DVD Chart at its peak of number six for the issue dated June 30, 2012" 2012?
• "The next week... The next week" Overuse of the next week here.
• "however, it rose to number one the next week" next week is way too used. Try to use the following week or another word.

•  Done — Tomíca^(T2ME) 17:55, 5 October 2012 (UTC)

Everything else seems to be very good. — ΛΧΣ21™ 19:10, 28 September 2012 (UTC)