Talk:Grand Duchy of Tuscany/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk) 03:22, 18 September 2010 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be reviewing this article for possible GA status. My review should be posted within the next day or two. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 03:22, 18 September 2010 (UTC)

I've decided to place this article on hold until the below issues are addressed. Nikkimaria (talk) 20:10, 18 September 2010 (UTC)

Unfortunately I'm going to have to close this review due to inactivity. I encourage interested editors to re-nominate once the below concerns have been addressed. Cheers, Nikkimaria (talk) 03:30, 27 September 2010 (UTC)

Writing and formatting

• Section headings shouldn't start with "The"
• Don't use contractions in article test
• "Until the advent of the House of Lorraine, Tuscany was nominally a state of the Holy Roman Empire until the Peace of Westphalia in 1648" - which "until" condition is correct?
• "Under the Medici, Tuscany thrived, while not as internationally renowned as the old republic, it bore witness to unprecedented economic and military success under Cosimo I and his sons, until the reign of Ferdinando II; whose reign saw the beginning of the state's long economic decline" - grammar
• "The two Habsburg monarchs declared Pius V's actions to be invalid. Cosimo's relative, Queen Catherine of France, only viewed him with the utmost disdain" - "him" being Cosimo or the Pope?
• Link suzerainty and other potentially unfamiliar terms
• "Rumours circulated at the Viennese court that had Cosimo as a candidate for King of England, as by Catholic reckoning England had devolved on the Papacy with the death of Mary I in 1553" - clarify
• What is an Imperial diploma?
• "During the Holy League" - HL is a group, not a time period
• "The Administration of the state was delegated to bureaucrats" - why is Administration capitalized?
• marrying the first non-Habsburg candidate since Alessandro de' Medici, Duke of Florence, Christina of Lorraine" - phrasing is a bit confusing
• "at dawn of the 17th century" - grammar
• "Ferdindando, despite no longer being a cardinal" - we didn't know he was a cardinal
• "Tuscany was overcome with religious orders" - do you mean "overrun"?
• What is a "provincial yolk"?
• "Ferdinando's elder son, Cosimo, mounted the throne following his death" - his "eldest son" "ascended the throne"?
• Don't link the same term more than once, especially not in close proximity
• "before empty monasteries" -> "previously empty monasteries"?
• Read through to check for appropriate use of commas
• "the country's population" - isn't it a grand duchy, not a country?
• Avoid conditional verbs where possible
• "On July 9 1737, Gian Gastone died; the last male Medici of the Grand Ducal line" - grammar
• Check uses of grand duke vs Grand Duke and grand duchy vs Grand Duchy
• Leopold or Leopoldo?
• " (A state created solely to accommodate the House of Bourbon-Parma until they could re-assume their Parmese sovereignty)." - grammar
• "The Second Austro-Sardinian broke out" - missing word?
• Be consistent in formatting dates as Day Month or Month Day
• You probably don't need to tell us that the Pope is the head of the Catholic Church, and don't tell us that Charles V was Holy Roman Emperor twice in one section
• "on the 27th of that month" -> "on April 27" or "on 27 April" (depending on which date formatting you choose)
• You should probably split some of the longer paragraphs to improve readability
• Don't include both categories and their subcategories - categorize using the most specific category applicable

Accuracy and verifiability

• Was Tuscany restored after the 1814 or 1815 Napoleonic collapse?
• Bibliography should come after Citations
• Citation needed for:

• his alleged father, Pope Clement VII
• Cosimo's reign was one of the most militaristic Tuscany had ever seen.
• Tuscany was overcome with religious orders, all of whom were not obliged to pay taxes
• Tuscany's decline climaxed in his reign
• Their union wrought a high level of discontentment
• Despite this merit, his subjects dismissed him as a foreigner. His affinity for Austria was equally unpalatable
• Italy was engulfed in popular rebellion
• The said revolution toppled the throne of France, and caused disarray across Europe
• Despite his attempts at acquiescence, street fighting in opposition to the regime sprang up in August
• Leopold II was coerced into abandoning Tuscany by Republicans

• Don't give full citation details for Bibliography entries in Citations
• Be consistent in how you denote page ranges
• Bibliography should either be in alphabetical order or in order of citation in the text
• Ref 2: "citation number 1" does not refer to Heraldica.org
• Identical refs should be combined per WP:NAMEDREFS (for example, refs 12-14)
• Formatting for Bowring should be the same as for other entries
• Why does Woolrych specify that the book predates the ISBN while Booth does not?
• "Orion books" -> "Orion Books" or "Orion Publishing Group"
• "Vintage books" -> "Vintage Books"
• Be consistent in including or excluding publisher location
• Ref 3: last name first
• Use a consistent format for retrieval date
• ref 48: formatting

Broad

• Try to minimize the repetition of information between different sections

Neutrality

• Maintain an encyclopedic tone at all times, and avoid informal phrasings like "landed him in trouble"
• Careful of WP:W2W and WP:ASF

Stability

No issues noted

Images

• Paintings created by an artist should be described as "by" that artist, not "after"
• Kingdom of Etruria map needs a copyright tag

I'm a bit confused by why you think being a grand duchy and being a country are mutually exclusive. Luxembourg is a country. john k (talk) 21:48, 18 September 2010 (UTC)

Was the Grand Duchy of Tuscany considered a country? If so, that should probably be explained - the word "country" occurs only once in the article, and only incidentally. Nikkimaria (talk) 23:51, 18 September 2010 (UTC)

I don't see why it wouldn't be considered a country. Before 1801, it was, at least in part, an imperial fief, but I'm not sure that imperial fiefs should not be considered countries. After 1814, though, it was completely sovereign. It was as much a country as any other place, at that point. john k (talk) 05:29, 19 September 2010 (UTC)