Talk:Grey's Anatomy season 4/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by TRLIJC19 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: TRLIJC19 (talk · contribs) 12:57, 28 May 2012 (UTC)Reply

I'll be reviewing shortly. TRLIJC19 (talk) 12:57, 28 May 2012 (UTC)Reply

I'll read through the article and list any existent issues below. TRLIJC19 (talk) 15:18, 28 May 2012 (UTC)Reply

Issues

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  • Lead
    • This sentence, "the season continues the stories of a group [...]", should say "the season continues the story of a group [...]".
    • Third sentence of first paragraph needs to be rephrased, doesn't make sense.
    • This sentence, "the season was officially released on DVD as five-disc box set [...]", should say "the season was officially released on DVD as a five-disc box set [...]".
    • First sentence of second paragraph, should say "in the show's history", rather than "in the show history".
    • This sentence, '"The season received mixed response from critics and fans and resulted [...]" should say "The season received mixed responses from critics, resulting in [...]"
    • Remove sentence about featuring double two part episodes, irrelevant for lead.
    • This sentence, "The season was interrupted by the 2007–2008 Writers Guild of America strike which resulted in the production of only seventeen episodes instead of twenty-three originally planned." should have commas after strike and episodes.
  • Production
    • The first sentence is a run-on.
    • First paragraph has no references.
    • This sentence, "Since the show had only produced ten episodes before the winter-holiday hiatus and aired another one after the break ended, the show decided to complete the season with six new episodes and returned on April 24, 2008." needs commas after hiatus and "six new episodes".
    • You need to copy edit the crew subsection.
I don't know what you mean. Could you be a little more specific? Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 16:23, 28 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
Copy editing means to go through, fixing grammar, spelling, and cohesion issues. ie.: "The regular directors were Rob Corn and Jessica Yu. Producer Shonda Rhimes wrote five of the seventeen episodes, two of which along with fellow producer Krista Vernoff." This sentence should say "two of which were along [...]" TRLIJC19 (talk) 16:24, 28 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Cast
    • This sentence, "The shows' most episodes are narrated by Ellen Pompeo who portrayed the protagonist, surgical resident Dr. Meredith Grey, whose storylines are the series' focal points." has several problems.
      • It's a run-on.
      • It should be rephrased saying "The majority of the show's episodes are narrated by Ellen Pompeo [...]"
        • "The word, "the", in the beginning of that sentence, is misspelled as "he".
    • It doesn't tell who plays Derek, nor does it mention that he is Chief of Neuro
    • This sentence, "Former Reunion star Chyler Leigh was promoted to series regular status after short appearances in the final two episodes of the third season, portraying Meredith's half-sister Lexie Grey, who opts for a surgical internship at Seattle Grace Hospital againts Massachusetts General Hospital, after her mother's sudden death." has multiple issues.
      • Run-on
      • "Against" is spelled incorrectly.
    • This sentence, "Former The Silence of the Lambs star, Brooke Smith [...]", should be rephrased to say "Former Silence of the Lambs star, Brooke Smith [...]."
    • Add/use better transitional words in the "recurring characters" paragraph, because it reads choppy.
    • The sentence about Addison is a run-on, also unlink Private Practice, in that sentence, per WP:OVERLINK. (It already is linked above)
  • Controversy
    • The picture of Washington, should not contain wikilinks, and should only use last names.
    • Last two sentences of first paragraph aren't referenced.
    • here are no references for the first 4 sentences of second paragraph.
    • Fix the link to ABC in the second to last sentence of second paragraph.
Don't you mean first paragraph? There's no reference in the second to last sentence of the second paragraph. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 12:31, 29 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
There is a wikilink to ABC that is not properly formatted in the second paragraph. (It looks like this: [[ABC]) TRLIJC19 (talk) 12:46, 29 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Reception
    • Critical response
      • In the critique from Florrey, "centered" is misspelled.
    • Awards and nominations
      • This sentence, "At the 60th Primetime Emmy Awards in September 21, 2008 [...]", in should read on.
      • There's only one reference in this section, every sentence needs a reference.
      • Last four sentences aren't referenced.
    • Ratings
      • This section needs a bit of copy editing, as well.
  • References: There are some major issues with reference links, leaving many statements unsourced.
    • These references are dead (meaning they need to be replaced):
      • 4
      • 5
      • 6
      • 12
      • 25
      • 29
    • Standardize date format on all references.
    • Reference 32 is broken.
  • General
    • This page overlinks a lot. Everything leading to a Wikipedia article, should only be linked once in the article, and once in the lead. (Ex.: Shonda Rhimes is linked 5 times, whereas it should only be linked twice.)
      • Shonda is still linked under the episode list.
    • Read through and do some general copy editing to article.
    • The "see also" section should be removed, as a link to that already exists above the list of episodes.
    • Fix the dablink to Brooke Smith.
What dablink? Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 13:08, 29 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
The one to Brooke Smith in the Silence of The Lambs sentence. TRLIJC19 (talk) 13:25, 29 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
I'm sorry. I don't think I understand what you are referring to. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 13:35, 29 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
It's okay. A dablink stands for disambiguation link, meaning that the link leads to a disambiguation page. The way it was typed in the edit box is Brooke Smith (dab), but it should read Brooke Smith (actress). TRLIJC19 (talk) 13:38, 29 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
Got it. Thanks. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 13:53, 29 May 2012 (UTC)Reply

I am putting the review on hold so the nominator can adress the problems. Please fix these issues within seven (7) days and then I'll continue on with the review. If these issues are not fixed within the limit, then the nomination will unfortunately have to be failed. When you fix an issue, please strike through it using this template: <del>Issue to be resolved.</del> When you type that, it will appear like this: Issue to be resolved. Looking forward to finishing the review, TRLIJC19 (talk) 15:18, 28 May 2012 (UTC)Reply

I've listed a new issue under awards and nominations. TRLIJC19 (talk) 14:59, 29 May 2012 (UTC)Reply
  Done Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 15:39, 29 May 2012 (UTC)Reply

Review

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

With all issues having been corrected, this article is now being promoted to good article status! Congratulations to the nominator for all the work they've done for the article. Happy editing! TRLIJC19 (talk) 16:21, 29 May 2012 (UTC)Reply