Talk:Guilty Gear Isuka/GA2

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Reviewer: Tezero (talk · contribs) 01:20, 10 March 2014 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

The article's close; I only really have a few gripes about wording and grammar.

• "PS2 version" --> "the PS2 version"
• "configuration, that" --> "configuration that"
• "start a fight" --> "starts a fight"
• Dequote all instances of "soul" except the first.
• "intallments features" --> "installments' features"
• "allows to perform" --> "allow the player to perform"
• "super moves and break combinations and super moves, respectively.": This is ambiguous. Is it that the tension gauge allows the player to use super moves and break combinations, while the burst gauge only allows them to use super moves?
• "It introduces" --> "The game introduces"
• "originally for PlayStation 2" --> "not included in the arcade version". Also, remove the parentheses.
• "a robot (Robo-Ky II)" --> "a robot named Robo-Ky II"
• Also remove the parentheses in the sentence after that.
• "nearly every character's aspect (including buckles and hair)" --> "nearly every aspect of the characters, such as buckles and hair"
• "to survival mode" --> "to the survival mode"
• "the company said that Guilty Gear Isuka was the game's name.": Ambiguous. Was this said at JAMMA? Did they correct themselves using that statement, or was it simply a new name for the game?
• "the Atomiswave arcades" --> "Atomiswave arcade cabinets"
• "was noted to sound as good ideas" --> "were considered good ideas in theory"
• "it causes a "chaos"" --> "found it to cause "chaos""
• "Its new features, poorly executed," --> "The perceived poor execution of its new features"
• "other addition" --> "other additions"
• "criticized how" --> "he criticized how"
• "(from top to down)": Add a colon after it.
• "On the side of burst gauge, there is the character's "souls".": "The character's "souls" lie on the side of the burst gauge." Tezero (talk) 01:20, 10 March 2014 (UTC)

Thank you very much, @Tezero:. I hope I've had corrected all issues you pointed with this edit. What is your verdict? Gabriel Yuji (talk) 01:36, 10 March 2014 (UTC)

Eh, it's improved, but there are a few new mistakes as a result. I'll just correct it myself later and then pass the article. Tezero (talk) 01:38, 10 March 2014 (UTC)

Ok. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 01:42, 10 March 2014 (UTC)