Talk:Gusen concentration camp/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K.e.coffman (talk · contribs) 01:51, 25 January 2020 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this article; will start shortly. --K.e.coffman (talk) 01:51, 25 January 2020 (UTC)

Points of clarification

• ...there were also large numbers of Spanish Republicans,... -- please consider linking "Spanish Republicans". BTW, Spanish Republican (singular) redirect to Second Spanish Republic. I was not sure this would be the link you might want, so I did not link it myself.
  • Done
• This is a bit awkward: Most Austrians… [in 1918] & the Austrian people achieved their goal… [in 1938] -- this implies to me that the very same Austrians advocated for the same goal twenty years apart. In addition, "the Austrian people" implies nationality rather than ethnicity; many of Austrian citizens probably did not want a union with Nazi Germany, especially not the Jewish population.
  • Fixed
• The first prisoners and guards moved in on 25 May 1940, officially opening the camp. -- suggest "The camp was officially opened on 25 May 1940, when the first prisoners and guards moved in". Otherwise, it reads like the inmates opened the camp.
  • Done, thanks
• Because of the harsh conditions and mass murder, one group of prisoners would die to be replaced by another. -- this is awkward, as "would" implies a future time and / or that there was causality between replacements and harsh conditions. I think what this sentence is trying to say is: SS did not care about high mortality due to abysmal conditions; they could simply replace the dead.
  • The source does not really say that, it emphasizes the waves/groups of prisoners. I changed it to One group of prisoners would die, but the number was maintained due to transports of incoming prisoners.
• ...were transported to the main camp to be gassed... -- does the "main camp" refer to Mauthausen or Gusen I?
  • Mauthausen, clarified
• known as "death group" due to the high mortality rate -- known to whom?
  • Source does not say, so I took this out.
• This "murderous brainstorming" was... -- I assume it's a direct quote from the source. If so, it's better to attribute, i.e. This "murderous brainstorming", in the words of the historian X, was....
  • done
• where fire brigade members were very willing to surrender... -- if the (local) firemen were serving as guards then this should be mentioned. Otherwise, it's unclear what firemen were doing at the camp.
  • First mentioned in the SS command section but I added clarification here.

--K.e.coffman (talk) 23:35, 28 January 2020 (UTC)

• • Many thanks for your comments and your excellent copyedit! buidhe 03:47, 30 January 2020 (UTC)

Assessment against GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

--K.e.coffman (talk) 02:16, 5 February 2020 (UTC)