Talk:Gypsy (Lady Gaga song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) Aoba47 (talk) 21:23, 30 November 2016 (UTC)

• Grabbing this for a review if that is okay with you, as I really enjoy the song (shame it was not released as a single). Aoba47 (talk) 21:23, 30 November 2016 (UTC)

Comments

• You refer to Lady Gaga by her real name in the "Writer" parameter of the infobox, but then refer to her by her stage name in the "Producer" parameter. I would imagine that it would consistently one or the other (I am thinking the stage name should be used in the "Writer" parameter due to the "Credits and personnel" section and other articles based on songs from the album).
  • Yes you are correct and I checked this norm across the other articles also, that the stage name is the one used in the writer parameter and hence did not deviate from it. Strangely, WP:SONGS does not list anything about it. What do you reckon? —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 07:15, 5 December 2016 (UTC)
    • Thank you for the response. I think that it should be okay a this level, but I would recommend raising this issue in the WikiProject sometime in the future to clear this up (I would imagine that the use of stage names in song-related articles would affect a lot of things). Aoba47 (talk) 14:36, 5 December 2016 (UTC)
• The "where the two had interacted" part seems unnecessary, as it can be assumed from the previous section about the song being developed with Madeon.
• Who described "Gypsy" as the most personal song from the album? A brief note should be added here.
• I think you should add "while" in front of the phrase "wearing a moustache".
• The last sentence of the first paragraph of the "Background and development" section seems like weasel wordy, specifically "good dance songs" and "make their collaboration historic". I would suggest revising to avoid this praise that does not seem appropriate.
  • I removed it in hindsight. Did not seem appropriate for the song's context. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 07:15, 5 December 2016 (UTC)
• The phrase "as list of singles" sounds awkward to me; I would recommend revising it to something like "under/in" rather than "as".
• I do not think you need two images of Lady Gaga performing the song on the Artpop Ball, especially as they are of the same outfit. I would recommend using one or the other, and put it in the "Live performances" section.
• You say that Hughes praises the SNL performance, but he only does so partially. I do not think that referring to it as "a confusing display from beginning to end" sounds like praise, and it might be worth adding that he did have some criticism of the performance.

@IndianBio: Great job with the article. It was a very interesting and informative read. My comments are rather minor, and once they are addressed, I will pass the article. Aoba47 (talk) 01:47, 1 December 2016 (UTC)

@Aoba47:, thanks for taking this up. I will be responding in 3–4 days time. Currently developing some articles just wanna be done with them and get free time to respond to reviews in a good way. Hope that's fine? —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 11:51, 1 December 2016 (UTC)

@IndianBio: No worries, take as much time as you need with it, and good luck with your other projects. Aoba47 (talk) 21:17, 1 December 2016 (UTC)

@Aoba47:, I have addressed all the issues except the first one as I'm not sure what to do here per the predecent with the other song articles. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 07:15, 5 December 2016 (UTC)

@IndianBio: Thank you for your response, and great work with the article! ✓ Pass Aoba47 (talk) 14:41, 5 December 2016 (UTC)

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