Talk:HMS Beagle (H30)/GA1
Latest comment: 10 years ago by 80.111.155.138 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 22:31, 14 December 2013 (UTC)
I will review this one, comments to follow. Zawed (talk) 22:31, 14 December 2013 (UTC)
Description
- In the text, the turbines are as Brown-Curtis when infobox says they are Parsons.
- Complement is 134 in text but 138 in infobox (I assume the infobox should refer to its peacetime complement not its wartime).
- "...and 'Y' gun was removed...": "...and the 'Y' gun was removed..." (or perhaps her).
- Actually, since the gun is named, I don't believe that either suggestion is appropriate. They'd be fine if the text used "third" gun.
- That's fine. Zawed (talk) 07:18, 21 December 2013 (UTC)
Construction and service
- "...4 April – 17 September 1938...": the dash should be to, as per the following sentence which uses this format.
- "This assignment only two months...": "This assignment lasted only two months..."?
- "The ship was tasked to blockade the German-occupied ports...": "The ship was tasked with the blockade of the German-occupied ports
- I don't agree with these; your suggestion turns the sentence into passive voice. The existing text is simpler and more direct.
- I can accept that; slipping into passive voice is a bad habit of mine. Zawed (talk) 07:18, 21 December 2013 (UTC)
Other stuff
- Image tag looks fine.
- Duplicate link: John Brown & Company
- No dab links.
- Running Checklinks, the external link to u-boat net is described as suspicious (but it works for me?).
That's all for now, will check back in a few days. Zawed (talk) 22:56, 14 December 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for catching the little inconsistencies between the infobox and text.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:58, 20 December 2013 (UTC)
- Passing as GA. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 07:18, 21 December 2013 (UTC)
Just to add to "other stuff". HMS Beagle appears in the Ealing Studios production of "The Big Blockade" (1941), a wartime propaganda film.80.111.155.138 (talk) 16:09, 16 May 2014 (UTC)