Talk:HMS Bulwark (1899)/GA1
Latest comment: 5 years ago by Sturmvogel 66 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: L293D (talk · contribs) 15:31, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
No big issues, just minor stuff:
Bulwark, named for "the solid part of a ship's side extending above deck"
- maybe link Bastion- If it had a naval usage, sure, but it doesn't.
- Bulwark (disambiguation) and wikt:bulwark say it does. L293D (☎ • ✎) 19:00, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- If it had a naval usage, sure, but it doesn't.
Bulwark recommissioned on 3 January 1905
- shouldn't it say Bulwark was recommissioned?She was recommissioned the following day with a nucleus crew
- could you add an explanation for what is a nucleus crew? Is it a skeleton crew, or something different?- To be honest, I'm not entirely sure, but I think that it might differ in that the nucleus was probably more oriented towards keeping the ship maintained and training new crewmembers.
- All those decommissings and recommissionings, sometimes just one day apart, are very confusing. Could you add an explanation?
- If I could find a source that explains RN personnel policy during this time, sure. Used to be that a ship would commission with a crew for a time and then when she decommissioned, the crew would be released from service while the officers would need to find new ships lest they would be put on half-pay. That's how it was during the Napoleonic period, but I'm not sure how much it still worked that way a hundred years later.
- The section heading "Explosion" would be better as "Sinking", IMO
- Why do you prefer that? The whole section is about what caused her to sink and why.
The wreck lies at depth of about 30 feet (9 m)
- Bulwark's wreck lies, not the gun you just mentioned.- Umm, the gun is part of the previous sentence.
- Of course, but I still thought it might be worth clarifying. L293D (☎ • ✎) 19:00, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Umm, the gun is part of the previous sentence.
That's all. L293D (☎ • ✎) 15:31, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for looking this over.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:20, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Nice work! I'm especially impressed by the level of detail about the ship's prewar career. Promoting. L293D (☎ • ✎) 19:00, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- I wish they could all have this much detail, but you rarely get 30-page articles on the ship's history.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:41, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
- Nice work! I'm especially impressed by the level of detail about the ship's prewar career. Promoting. L293D (☎ • ✎) 19:00, 14 March 2019 (UTC)