Talk:HMS Caesar (1896)/GA1

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Peacemaker67 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:22, 17 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

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1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
  • any clue as to where the hull-mounted TT were located?
  • Added.
  • query: should it be The ship was commissioned?
  • From what I understand, it's more common in BrEng to say "the ship commissioned", but I may be wrong
  • I suppose it's not that big of a deal, but Google Books results reveal examples of what I'm talking about. (I've removed the latter links due to them screwing with the formatting of the table, but accept that there is a valid contention that this turn of phrase is acceptable)
  • was appointed in command 21 December 1901 seems too clipped, how about was appointed to command her on 21 December 1901?
  • That works for me.
  • query: should it be Caesar was commissioned? (couple of occasions)
  • Caesar was rammed in fog by the barque Excelsior at Sheerness seems split, perhaps indicate by which ship, then the conditions?
  • A good point.
  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
  • suggest the first mention of her displacement be in full (currently t instead of tons)
  • Good idea.
  • I wonder if the terms "seaboats" and "steamer" are too informal
  • See how it reads now.
  • 1900–1901 should probably be 1900–01 per WP:DATERANGE (same for 1907–08 further down)
  • Good catch.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
  2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
  7. Overall assessment. Placed on hold for seven days for points to be addressedPassing, all points addressed