Talk:HMS Escapade/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: L293D (talk · contribs) 14:17, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

Source review

Everything good.

Image review

Everything good too.

Infobox

• There is an inconsistency between the infobox and prose for the shaft power. I know you're rounding the numbers in the prose, but the actual shaft power is the same character length.

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 17:03, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Lead

• After participating in the Norwegian Campaign in early 1940, she participated in anti-invasion duty and escorted capital ships to Gibraltar and in Operation Menace, then returned to the British Isles for continued escort duty, punctuated by participation in Operation Rubble and the hunt for Scharnhorst and Gneisenau in early 1941. - A little long, maybe split in two. Also 'participated' comes up twice, reword one occurrence.

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 17:03, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

• in late 1942 and early 1943. - I think that from late 1942 to early 1943 would sound better

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 17:03, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Description

• Some people don't know what a ship complement is.

• Linked. Kges1901 (talk) 17:03, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Construction and Career

• equipment like the armament - 'such as' would be better

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 16:54, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

• She collided - change to "Escapade collided", since in the preceding sentence you mentioned a lot of thing

• Disagree, because no other named ship is yet introduced. Kges1901 (talk) 16:54, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

• The ship was attached to the Mediterranean Fleet, together with most of the rest of her flotilla, beginning in September 1935, during the Abyssinian Crisis, returning home with the rest of her sisters in March 1936. - a lot of commas, reads weirdly.

• Split into two sentences. Kges1901 (talk) 16:54, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

• She was struck by one of her sisters, Eclipse, - a ship being "struck" normally means it is struck from the Naval register, or decommissioned.

• I don't think this is an issue because it is clear from the context what meaning is used. Kges1901 (talk) 16:54, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

• Escapade attacked single U-boats in the English Channel on 5 November and 15 November, rescuing survivors from the torpedoed SS Navasota on 5 December. - were the attacks successful?

• Clarified. Kges1901 (talk) 16:54, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

• The destroyer returned to Scapa Flow after the sortie and screened the light cruiser Southampton as she departed Scapa Flow alongside her sister ship Electra on 12 April. - which "she"? Southamton or Escapade?

• Clarified. Kges1901 (talk) 16:54, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

• Escapade was under refit on the Tyne - clarify what the Tyne is.

• Done. Kges1901 (talk) 16:54, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

• Change redlink to Convoy Qp 4 to existing article at Convoy PQ 4

• The convoys were not really the same thing and differed significantly in terms of merchant ships Kges1901 (talk) 16:54, 27 November 2018 (UTC).

• Nice work. L293D (☎ • ✎) 22:06, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

GA Progress

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

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