Talk:HMS Fame (H78)/GA1
Latest comment: 9 years ago by Parsecboy in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Parsecboy (talk · contribs) 14:04, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
Will get to this one shortly. Parsecboy (talk) 14:04, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS):
- One dupe link for Parsons
- I'd like to see a bit more context on the non-intervention patrols off Spain
- Added a few more specifics; is that what you wanted?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:17, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
- Yeah, that works.
- Added a few more specifics; is that what you wanted?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:17, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
- The line about the 6th DF becoming the 8th DF reads oddly to me - the "but" seems to imply that the ships of the 6th DF were (or should have been) transferred out of the flotilla when it was renamed, but Fame remained. I think it could also include a reference to the start of WWII, since many readers won't have a strong grasp of the chronology. I'd probably say something like "...renumbered the 8th DF in April 1939, six months before the outbreak of World War II. Fame remained in the 8th DF until July 1940..."
- "During the Norwegian Campaign...during the Battle of Narvik" - two "during"s in one sentence
- Most readers won't recognize Operation Neptune - "Normandy landings", "invasion of Normany", etc. would be much more widely known
- Think you mean Leith, not Leith
- You might make the connection between Trujillo's death and the ship's renaming clearer
- It's a bit of a reach as is, as my sources only say that it was renamed in '62, which happens to be the year after Trujillo's death--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:17, 26 October 2015 (UTC).
- Fair enough.
- It's a bit of a reach as is, as my sources only say that it was renamed in '62, which happens to be the year after Trujillo's death--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:17, 26 October 2015 (UTC).
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- Anything more available on the ship's activities in Dominican service?
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Passing now. Parsecboy (talk) 18:18, 29 October 2015 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
